Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic There are many different types of music in the world today Why do we need music Is the traditional music of a country more important than the Inte

Essay topics:

Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the
following topic:
There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need
music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the
International music that is heard everywhere nowadays?
You should write at least 250 words.
Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples
and relevant evidence.

Submitted by thaipham on Thu, 06/04/2020 - 00:17

Imagine that one day you will be asked to present your favourite songs in front of the international class. What will you choose? In fact, there are so many kinds of music in the world such as pop, rock, hip-hop or even traditional music. I guess you will choose ancient music from your culture to impress to the whole class. In my opinion, traditional music is the root of these modern kinds of music in present.

Firstly, each country has its own music, that creates diversity in the music world. Some ethics use stones to create the country melodies while others use bamboo tree to make the flutes. Other people even use cow skin to make the drum. All of these methods contribute to traditional music as well. This point shows that each traditional music has a specific stand in comparison with similar modern music in the world.

Secondly, traditional music makes a country to be proud of. When showing unique music from unique instruments, people will feel so happy and proud of. It presents an ethic had possessed a very old culture from their ancestor. For example, we certainly see in many music festivals, each country will choose one of the most famous unique songs to present. They believe that help them to introduce their own culture to the audience most efficiency.

Last but not least, traditional music was the economic music to play. Indeed, many kinds of music were played with raw instruments and that cost not much. While modern bands have to use electric instruments plus sound effects to perform their song, other traditional musicians would play their songs with simple equipment form nature. A band with five old men totally can play a perfect melody with the tools made in stones, tree or even the leaves. It also shows that they are talented in traditional music.

In conclusion, my opinion tend to vote for the traditional music according to their unique characteristics, it also helps us to preserve the culture for the future.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example, i guess, in conclusion, in fact, such as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1637.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 337.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85756676558 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46124859188 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537091988131 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.8694407546 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.9523809524 106.682146367 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0476190476 20.7667163134 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38095238095 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30831560557 0.244688304435 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112175254198 0.084324248473 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0868852319972 0.0667982634062 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177576648773 0.151304729494 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0530578470502 0.056905535591 93% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 13.0946893788 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.61 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example, i guess, in conclusion, in fact, such as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1637.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 337.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85756676558 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46124859188 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537091988131 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.8694407546 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.9523809524 106.682146367 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0476190476 20.7667163134 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38095238095 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30831560557 0.244688304435 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112175254198 0.084324248473 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0868852319972 0.0667982634062 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177576648773 0.151304729494 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0530578470502 0.056905535591 93% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 13.0946893788 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.61 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.