You should spend about 20 minutes on this task You live in a room with your college which you share with another student However there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work Write a letter to the accommodation offic

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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
You live in a room with your college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter:
- describe the situation
- explain your problems and why it is difficult to work
- say what kind of accommodation you would prefer
Write at least 150 words.

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to express my dissatisfaction with my roommate. We have nothing in common so I had to meet some problems when we live together.

Let me explain my situation. Lisa has just come to stay with me last month after my old roommate moved out. At first, everything was fine. But after a week, I can not stand it. She usually come room late, so I can not sleep early. Sometimes she plays music so loudly that I can not concentrate on my studies. In addition, it is not impolite if she often borrow my stuffs without asking me.

Would you kindly transfer me to another room or arrange me with other roommate? I would be appreciate if I could live in the room that is more quiet and peaceful because I have to take exams on next week. I would be grateful if I have same interests with my roommate.

Thank you for your consideration.

Yours faithfully,
Phuong

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 355, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'borrows'.
Suggestion: borrows
...dition, it is not impolite if she often borrow my stuffs without asking me. Would ...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 32.9175257732 109% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 26.3917525773 76% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 744.0 937.175257732 79% => OK
No of words: 167.0 206.0 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.45508982036 4.54256449028 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.59483629437 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58801813309 2.54303337028 102% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 127.690721649 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.670658682635 0.622605031667 108% => OK
syllable_count: 231.3 290.88556701 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 11.0 16.3608247423 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.4584372913 44.8134815571 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 53.1428571429 76.5299724578 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 11.9285714286 16.8248392259 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.21428571429 4.34317383033 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184569651601 0.216113520407 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0593960662865 0.0766984524023 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0722026607335 0.0603063233224 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131573686442 0.12726935374 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.061622545862 0.0580467560999 106% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 5.5 8.37731958763 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.23 70.7449484536 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.2 7.45979381443 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.7 8.71597938144 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.73 7.59969072165 89% => OK
difficult_words: 27.0 41.2886597938 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 8.62886597938 58% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.4 8.54432989691 75% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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