Argument Topic: The following appears in a letter to the editor for the West Lansburg News:
"The tufted groundhog lives in the coastal wetlands of West Lansburg. Ancient records suggest that the tufted groundhog once numbered in the millions. Since they were declared a wildlife sanctuary in 2004, development along the coastal wetlands has been prohibited. Now local development interests are lobbying for the West Lansburg council to allow an access road to be built along the edge of wetlands. Neighboring Eastern Carpenteria, which had a similar sanctuary, has seen its sea otter population decline since the repeal of its sanctuary status in 1978. In order to preserve the region's biodiversity and ensure a healthy environment, the West Lansburg council should not allow the road to be built.
The letter given to the editor of the West Lansburg News says the west lansburg council should not allow the roads to be built. This is based on the premise that the neighboring Eastern Carpenteria had a similar sanctuary and they had seen a decline as soon as the sanctuary was repealed. At first the argument may sound logical and true. But there are several facts which requires more evidence in order to validate the argument. Here are 3 evidences which are needed to evaluate the argument.
Firstly, The west Lansburg sanctuary is compared with the neighboring Eastern Carpenteria by saying the latter had a similar sanctuary. There is no evidence given about how they are similar. What are the facts or points that make it similar?, Are the habitat of both the sanctuary the same?. Answering to such questions will give enough evidence about the similarity between the sanctuaries. There may be a possibility that west lansburg santuary is far better than its neighboring one so building roads near West Lansburg would not repeal the sanctuary.
Secondly, The letter says ancient records suggest that the tufted groundhogonce numbered in millions. How much ancient these records are? , Are the records true ? , By whom where these records given was that a valid source on whom we can trust? . What are the current counts of the tufted groundhog?. There are so many points whose answers are not given. Giving answers to these questions will Strengthen the arguments. There can be a possibility that the records recorded at that time are fallcy. There must be a proper source of the record. There can also be a possibility that current count of the tufted groudhog is nill which will help building roads easily.
Lastly, The letter says to preserve the regions biodiversity and to ensure healthy environment roads should not be built on West Lansburg. Not building roads is not the only way to preserve the biodiversity of the regions. In order to preserve the biodiversity there can be many other way such as Shifting the sanctuary to some more better place where the sanctuary is safe. As there can be a possibility that building that road could save time of many people travelling and in order to preseve the biodiversity and environment different methods can be taken.
In conclusion, As now the argument given is full of flaws. Several bits of the given argument needs to be validated, as more evidence is required in order to strengthn the argument like - 1)Details should be provided in order to justify how the two sanctuaries are similar, 2) Ancient records that are mentioned in the argument needs to be validated for its truthness and 3) To preseve the biodiversity and to ensure healthly environment different options should be given rather than not building roads. More options are required in order to preserve the biodiversity.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 478 350
No. of Characters: 2316 1500
No. of Different Words: 197 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.676 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.845 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.599 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 161 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 128 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 89 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.12 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.015 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.4 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.287 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.495 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.099 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 139, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ns. How much ancient these records are? , Are the records true ? , By whom where ...
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Line 5, column 164, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...e records are? , Are the records true ? , By whom where these records given was t...
^
Line 5, column 246, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...at a valid source on whom we can trust? . What are the current counts of the tuft...
^
Line 5, column 544, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... must be a proper source of the record. There can also be a possibility that current ...
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Line 5, column 642, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to build' or 'build'.
Suggestion: to build; build
...tufted groudhog is nill which will help building roads easily. Lastly, The letter say...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 41, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'regions'' or 'region's'?
Suggestion: regions'; region's
...Lastly, The letter says to preserve the regions biodiversity and to ensure healthy envi...
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Line 7, column 329, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'better' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: better
... such as Shifting the sanctuary to some more better place where the sanctuary is safe. As t...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, then, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 39.0 19.6327345309 199% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2373.0 2260.96107784 105% => OK
No of words: 478.0 441.139720559 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96443514644 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68999957541 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.42050209205 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 738.0 705.55239521 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 19.7664670659 137% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 78.4060340334 57.8364921388 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.8888888889 119.503703932 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7037037037 23.324526521 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.48148148148 5.70786347227 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.67664670659 278% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200244600566 0.218282227539 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0607703056835 0.0743258471296 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0726668874384 0.0701772020484 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114716484205 0.128457276422 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0542476303937 0.0628817314937 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 14.3799401198 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.3550499002 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.197005988 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.32208582834 88% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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