People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Human mind is a mystery which we have tried to solve for millions of years , the human behaviour is the very attribute of his/her existence . People are moulded by many external factors which causes them to behave in a certain way, their childhood and upbringing plays a major role in the above statement and agree with it but there are some minor behaviours that are in our control.These next few examples will explain my stand on the statement .
A person has control over his behaviour to a certain extent , one major example which shows that outer forces changes a person’s behaviour is bullying. There are numerous instances of bullying in schools , workplaces, sports etc. the people getting bullied mostly are young teens and their mind is still developing. Childern who get bullied consider themselves weak and sometimes their self worth and self esteem takes a huge hit. This may lead them to take wrong steps and cause depression and anxiety. Many acclaimed sport athletes and actors have confessed being bullied in various interviews , Priyanka chopra who is well known Hollywood and Bollywood actress has said that her bully in school is the reason why her attitude towards life changed. This shows how other people have an effect on ones behaviour.
Another example which plays a major role in the person’s behaviour is the environment they live in.
Many people who go to jail and face its harsh conditions change their behaviour permanently , even when they come out their sleeping and eating habits remain as if they were controlled to do so. People in Texas-USA believe in god immensely and frown upon atheists but in other states like Los Angeles are completely different from the god loving people of Texas. Their life revolves around work and they barely have time for religious practices. Human behaviour is moulded by the society that we live in and the environment the society creates .
Adding to that people also behave differently depending on their occupation , an average person spends almost 30% of his/her life in their workspace. This takes a toll on a person’s behavioural patterns .For example an ex army general has a very regimented lifestyle compared to a doctor or a singer. Doctors maintain hygiene in and around their house, they cut their nails very often where as an ex army general would have a stiff posture and do regular exercise .People change their behaviour according to their occupations sometimes willingly and sometimes subconsciously .
Although majority of a person’s behaviour is affected by external forces some emotions and behaviours are within the bounds of a person’s personal mindset. Their anger , sadness and ability to cope with stress are within their control . But these abilities are overpowered and governed by many external forces, That’s why a person is what he eats and does.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, still, well, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 33.0505617978 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2398.0 2235.4752809 107% => OK
No of words: 469.0 442.535393258 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11300639659 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6330444371 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 215.323595506 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556503198294 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 741.6 704.065955056 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.4012425701 60.3974514979 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.9 118.986275619 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.45 23.4991977007 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.4 5.21951772744 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 23.0 7.80617977528 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14121336849 0.243740707755 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0446112963529 0.0831039109588 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0326746538564 0.0758088955206 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0784600387405 0.150359130593 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0337159571852 0.0667264976115 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.1392134831 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 11.8971910112 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.