Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
People often hold different perspectives on whether the rules that societies expect teenagers to obey are too severe. Some people believe it would be better for the development of teenagers, while others tend to contend that highly strict rules may cause young people to disobey. As for me, I strongly argue that the laws regulated by society nowadays is highly adequate. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, governments typically care about children's education, in order to protect them, it usually makes some strict laws. In addition, since most young people are not mature, with the laws, they will less likely to commit a crime or put themselves into danger. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. When I was in high school, my friend, Jack, invited me to his party. They even prepare for some weeds and alcohol for the activities. Thus, after I was drunk, I even took a pill which makes me extremely ecstatic. Nevertheless, because we constantly make some noise at midnight, some policies flocked into his house and arrested us. Therefore, after I was put into teenagers' jails for several months, I told to myself never make the same mistake. Also, with the rules, I would always keep the experience into my mind. Apparently, with the law, I was not addicted to drugs or cultivated bad behavior anymore. Thus, although it seems too strict for not allowing most children to stay outside until midnight, the law is absolutely helpful to cut down the number of children putting themself into a dangerous situation.
Secondly, society should put emphasis on children's health, by making these laws, children are less likely to get sick. To be more specific, since many teenagers are unaware of their diets, they typically spend money on junk food, such as hamburgers or cokes. Take my country as an example, drinks are not allowed in elementary schools in Taiwan. That's, teenagers could not bring unhealthy food to school. Otherwise, they have to face punishments by the teacher. With these rules, although children indeed lose some rights, however, their healths' are protected until they become adults. Apparently, the rate of overweight students is incredibly declining every year. Therefore, some rules seemly unreasonable are actually had a high-minded purpose. So, it's allowed for the government to create some laws to protect young people.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that today's laws require young people to obey are not strict at all. This is because governments typically place emphasis on the way of educating kids and because society cares about children's health.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 347, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, apparently, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, as for, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2225.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05681818182 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61230301958 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572727272727 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 695.7 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.6774878053 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.5769230769 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9230769231 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.84615384615 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139286415422 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0372164362837 0.076458572812 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0507312867102 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105023703552 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0644148518427 0.0645574589148 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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