In the lecture, the professor cast some objections toward the reading material that the electronic databases record is not superior than the hand-writing record. And she reckons that what the reading material said were uncertain.
To begin with, the author in the reading passage claimed that using electronic databases record could lower the cost for which reason was that it did not need the costs of storing and transferring. But in the listening, the professor denied and hold the opinion that the doctors were not going to throw out all of the paper records but keep them as emergency backup. Besides, the doctors who accepted the electronic records were required to pay for the paper-based storage fee as well.
Secondly, the reading passage said that the electronic records could help the docs with reducing the chances of medical mistakes. In turn, the prof go along with the idea that it couldn’t eliminate the possibility of errors. And what’s more, at a later time, the handwritten would be transferred into electronic system so the errors did exist constantly.
In a word, in the reading the author stated that the electronic records could help with the aiding research and it is beneficial for the prof to simply search the needed info of the patients’ without spending a lot of time looking for it. But the professor rebutted that some permissions (including the patient’s permission)were needed , and they need to pass some extremely complicated procedures and all the medical info was subjected to strict privacy laws. And when they attempted to obtain them, their asks were usually took as not for granted.
In the lecture, the professor cast some objections toward the reading material that the electronic databases record is not superior than the hand-writing record. And she reckons that what the reading material said were uncertain.
To begin with, the author in the reading passage claimed that using electronic databases record could lower the cost for which reason was that it did not need the costs of storing and transferring. But in the listening, the professor denied and hold the opinion that the doctors were not going to throw out all of the paper records but keep them as emergency backup. Besides, the doctors who accepted the electronic records were required to pay for the paper-based storage fee as well.
Secondly, the reading passage said that the electronic records could help the docs with reducing the chances of medical mistakes. In turn, the prof go along with the idea that it couldn’t eliminate the possibility of errors. And what’s more, at a later time, the handwritten would be transferred into electronic system so the errors did exist constantly.
In a word, in the reading the author stated that the electronic records could help with the aiding research and it is beneficial for the prof to simply search the needed info of the patients’ without spending a lot of time looking for it. But the professor rebutted that some permissions (including the patient’s permission)were needed , and they need to pass some extremely complicated procedures and all the medical info was subjected to strict privacy laws. And when they attempted to obtain them, their asks were usually took as not for granted.
- In the lecture the professor cast some objections toward the reading material that the electronic databases record is not superior than the hand writing record And she reckons that what the reading material said were uncertain To begin with the author in 76
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 133, Rule ID: SUPERIOR_THAN[1]
Message: The adjective superior is normally used with 'to'.
Suggestion: to
...tronic databases record is not superior than the hand-writing record. And she reckon...
^^^^
Line 3, column 308, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...the doctors were not going to throw out all of the paper records but keep them as emergenc...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 334, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ding the patient’s permissionwere needed , and they need to pass some extremely co...
^^
Line 7, column 524, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'taken'.
Suggestion: taken
...to obtain them, their asks were usually took as not for granted.
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, look, second, secondly, so, well, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 22.412803532 85% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 30.3222958057 92% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 5.01324503311 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1371.0 1373.03311258 100% => OK
No of words: 269.0 270.72406181 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09665427509 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68108499217 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 145.348785872 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546468401487 0.540411800872 101% => OK
syllable_count: 406.8 419.366225166 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 1.51434878587 396% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 21.2450331126 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.2275638529 49.2860985944 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.636363636 110.228320801 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4545454545 21.698381199 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.54545454545 7.06452816374 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.477228506761 0.272083759551 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.185005170367 0.0996497079465 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.198120153543 0.0662205650399 299% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.339319317625 0.162205337803 209% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.301200634691 0.0443174109184 680% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.3589403974 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 53.8541721854 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.2367328918 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.42419426049 105% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 63.6247240618 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.498013245 110% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.