Now a days there is ahuge technology revolution in many field of life. One of the important one is the computers, which is devise used in a lot of field, kids usualy play games by using computer. in my openion playing games these game is a waste of time. In this essay I will explaine and gives acouple of example why I believe that.
First, kids spend a lot of time in playing, in this case they will waste the time and ignore their education. this time can used by doing their home work or reading important things. For instance, my daughter use her computer to play called my graft and waste a many hours with this game, therfore, she never concered about home work. As a result her school level decline. After that , she begin to understand what is the problem. It's the video games. So , she by attention to her study and can arrange the time between studying and playing.
Second, playing computer games waste our time that have to be used in playing with their friends, furthermore learn kids who to communicat with each other and exchange the information, In addition to get an important skills of communication which are crucial for positive live. The kids in the past decade before the invention of computers games spend avery nice time by playing in gardens and inspire afrish air which is important to the health, instead of being inside with these harmful devices. Therfore they were more ceative than the children in these days, they can make their toys and share each other with the games.
Inconclusion, playing computer games, has a negative effects on children lifebecause it waste that time , that suppose to spend by studying their school topic and home work, or by playing sport game with their friends in fresh healthy inveronment, apposite to stay infrot of electric tools wich is harmful to their eyes, moreover may lead to addiction.
Now a days there is ahuge technology revolution in many field of life. One of the important one is the computers, which is devise used in a lot of field, kids usualy play games by using computer. in my openion playing games these game is a waste of time. In this essay I will explaine and gives acouple of example why I believe that.
First, kids spend a lot of time in playing, in this case they will waste the time and ignore their education. this time can used by doing their home work or reading important things. For instance, my daughter use her computer to play called my graft and waste a many hours with this game, therfore, she never concered about home work. As a result her school level decline. After that , she begin to understand what is the problem. It's the video games. So , she by attention to her study and can arrange the time between studying and playing.
Second, playing computer games waste our time that have to be used in playing with their friends, furthermore learn kids who to communicat with each other and exchange the information, In addition to get an important skills of communication which are crucial for positive live. The kids in the past decade before the invention of computers games spend avery nice time by playing in gardens and inspire afrish air which is important to the health, instead of being inside with these harmful devices. Therfore they were more ceative than the children in these days, they can make their toys and share each other with the games.
Inconclusion, playing computer games, has a negative effects on children lifebecause it waste that time , that suppose to spend by studying their school topic and home work, or by playing sport game with their friends in fresh healthy inveronment, apposite to stay infrot of electric tools wich is harmful to their eyes, moreover may lead to addiction.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Now a days there is ahuge technology rev...
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Message: Did you mean 'nowadays'?
Suggestion: Nowadays
Now a days there is ahuge technology revolution in...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a day' or simply 'days'?
Suggestion: a day; days
Now a days there is ahuge technology revolution in...
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Line 1, column 68, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun field seems to be countable; consider using: 'many fields'.
Suggestion: many fields
...there is ahuge technology revolution in many field of life. One of the important one is th...
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Line 1, column 155, Rule ID: A_LOT_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun field seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of fields'.
Suggestion: a lot of fields
... the computers, which is devise used in a lot of field, kids usualy play games by using comput...
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Suggestion: In
...ds usualy play games by using computer. in my openion playing games these game is ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...acouple of example why I believe that. First, kids spend a lot of time in playi...
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Suggestion: This
...te the time and ignore their education. this time can used by doing their home work ...
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Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...re, she never concered about home work. As a result her school level decline. Afte...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ult her school level decline. After that , she begin to understand what is the pro...
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Line 2, column 405, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'begins'.
Suggestion: begins
... school level decline. After that , she begin to understand what is the problem. Its ...
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Line 2, column 446, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
...egin to understand what is the problem. Its the video games. So , she by attention ...
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Suggestion: ,
... is the problem. Its the video games. So , she by attention to her study and can a...
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...the time between studying and playing. Second, playing computer games waste our...
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...furthermore learn kids who to communicat with each other and exchange the informa...
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Line 3, column 235, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'skill'?
Suggestion: skill
...mation, In addition to get an important skills of communication which are crucial for ...
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Suggestion:
...s and share each other with the games. Inconclusion, playing computer games, ha...
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Line 4, column 103, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'wastes'?
Suggestion: wastes
...tive effects on children lifebecause it waste that time , that suppose to spend by st...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... children lifebecause it waste that time , that suppose to spend by studying their...
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Line 4, column 202, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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Suggestion:
...chool topic and home work, or by playing sport game with their friends in fresh h...
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Line 4, column 300, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'tools'' or 'tool's'?
Suggestion: tools'; tool's
...nt, apposite to stay infrot of electric tools wich is harmful to their eyes, moreover...
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Line 4, column 368, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r eyes, moreover may lead to addiction.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, may, moreover, second, so, for instance, in addition, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1533.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 325.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71692307692 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4017715273 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553846153846 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 476.1 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 90.3697589536 48.9658058833 185% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.2 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6666666667 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.93333333333 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 22.0 5.5376344086 397% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.488581516048 0.236089414692 207% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.16300738374 0.076458572812 213% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.175813180981 0.0737576698707 238% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.324687940843 0.150856017488 215% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.233882187301 0.0645574589148 362% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Now a days there is ahuge technology rev...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 17, Rule ID: NOW_A_DAYS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nowadays'?
Suggestion: Nowadays
Now a days there is ahuge technology revolution in...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 21, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a day' or simply 'days'?
Suggestion: a day; days
Now a days there is ahuge technology revolution in...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 68, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun field seems to be countable; consider using: 'many fields'.
Suggestion: many fields
...there is ahuge technology revolution in many field of life. One of the important one is th...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 155, Rule ID: A_LOT_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun field seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of fields'.
Suggestion: a lot of fields
... the computers, which is devise used in a lot of field, kids usualy play games by using comput...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 213, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...ds usualy play games by using computer. in my openion playing games these game is ...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...acouple of example why I believe that. First, kids spend a lot of time in playi...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...te the time and ignore their education. this time can used by doing their home work ...
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Line 2, column 350, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...re, she never concered about home work. As a result her school level decline. Afte...
^^
Line 2, column 398, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ult her school level decline. After that , she begin to understand what is the pro...
^^
Line 2, column 405, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'begins'.
Suggestion: begins
... school level decline. After that , she begin to understand what is the problem. Its ...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 446, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
...egin to understand what is the problem. Its the video games. So , she by attention ...
^^^
Line 2, column 469, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... is the problem. Its the video games. So , she by attention to her study and can a...
^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the time between studying and playing. Second, playing computer games waste our...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 155, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...furthermore learn kids who to communicat with each other and exchange the informa...
^^
Line 3, column 235, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'skill'?
Suggestion: skill
...mation, In addition to get an important skills of communication which are crucial for ...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s and share each other with the games. Inconclusion, playing computer games, ha...
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Line 4, column 103, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'wastes'?
Suggestion: wastes
...tive effects on children lifebecause it waste that time , that suppose to spend by st...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 118, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... children lifebecause it waste that time , that suppose to spend by studying their...
^^
Line 4, column 202, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...chool topic and home work, or by playing sport game with their friends in fresh h...
^^
Line 4, column 300, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'tools'' or 'tool's'?
Suggestion: tools'; tool's
...nt, apposite to stay infrot of electric tools wich is harmful to their eyes, moreover...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 368, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r eyes, moreover may lead to addiction.
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, may, moreover, second, so, for instance, in addition, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1533.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 325.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71692307692 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4017715273 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553846153846 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 476.1 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 90.3697589536 48.9658058833 185% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.2 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6666666667 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.93333333333 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 22.0 5.5376344086 397% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.488581516048 0.236089414692 207% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.16300738374 0.076458572812 213% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.175813180981 0.0737576698707 238% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.324687940843 0.150856017488 215% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.233882187301 0.0645574589148 362% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.