The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people’s efficiency so that they have more leisure time
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take.
technology makes our life easier and reduces the human effort. that increases our ability to concentrate on bigger problems, some of which are born from the advancement in technology itself. let us take the example of our daily life, we wake up in the morning with the beep of our alarms, the toaster gets our breakfast ready and finally we take a cab to commute ourselves to the office. now, if we for a moment go back in time and reflect on how the whole situation would have been without technology we would have to wake up on time all by ourselves. For which we had to sacrifice our late night efforts on completing an assignment, and have to be cautiously aware of the time in our sleep. we would have to prepare our own breakfast and may have to walk ourselves to the office. thus, all of this would waste enough energy and time. In the world of technology, we can avoid these mundane activities and focus majorly on the bigger picture. now, does that increase our leisure time? Well, that varies from person to person. A person who is a workaholic will address the problems that technology has given rise to, like environmental concerns, cyber security, data privacy and resolve these issues while a laid back person may not take much effort in improving our quality of life.
let us talk about the advancement of technology in the field of medical sciences. With the evolvement of the various medical tests, detection of the disease has become more accurate and easier. does that mean that the doctors have more leisure time? The answer is no. now, that detection is faster, the treatment procedure can be started earlier which may spare the patient further harm. A single doctor can now treat more number of patients in the same alloted time and more lives could be saved.
technology has actually given us enough free time. The choice is ours whether to use it for leisure or use it to enhance our skills by facing more serious problems. In the field of entertainment, there has also been enough technological progress. Nowadays, you have access to all the movies and songs just on your fingertip. However, if you assess today's generation, there is a considerable rise in mental problems rising from loneliness, anxiety and inferiority complex. People are more glued to their phones and are cutting down on the human interaction, which completely eclipses the point of enhancing communication to bring our lives closer. Kids these days have become more self-oriented and social skills are found to take a dip in the coming generations. these have all risen from technology. Yes, today you can speak to a person who are in a different continent than you but you done have enough time to go out fishing with your siblings. you may have a thousand friends on facebook but nota single friend to share your tiffin with. thus technology has also brought us farther from our real lives and there is definitely a larger generation gap. our leisure has also become advanced but it has also given rise to many problems and affected the quality of our lives.
In conclusion, I would like to term technology as a boon which comes with its own side effects. it decreases human effort but also gives rise to new problems which are to be resolved.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, however, if, may, so, thus, well, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 33.0505617978 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 80.0 58.6224719101 136% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2686.0 2235.4752809 120% => OK
No of words: 568.0 442.535393258 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72887323944 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88187981987 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55030716845 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 278.0 215.323595506 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489436619718 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 865.8 704.065955056 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.2370786517 153% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.3021670755 60.3974514979 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.6451612903 118.986275619 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3225806452 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.70967741935 5.21951772744 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 7.80617977528 231% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250061930711 0.243740707755 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0691307775779 0.0831039109588 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0487905276758 0.0758088955206 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162433101715 0.150359130593 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0395753334567 0.0667264976115 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 14.1392134831 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 100.480337079 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.