Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend more money on education of very young children than to spend money on universities. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
I do not agree with that statement, because I think spending money on universities for development of a country is more important than spending money on very young children. I hold this opinion because of several reasons. First, university students are more cognitive and aware than very young children in various attitudes and aspects such as approaches of developing a country, so they deserve more investment and concentration. Second, according to my point of view, university students play more important role in society than very young children, because they are more familiar with the dilemma and difficulties of their community, also they can better find solution for those problems.
As far as I am concerned, adult students are more aware to their society, culture, economy, and policy, thus they can efficiently manage and administrate their community's crisis in order to develop their country successfully. In other words, infants and very young children are not still ready to perceive so many concepts, because they are not mature enough to be prepared to confront to serious problems. Therefore, it does not necessary for government to spend a lot of money on young children, because they are not able to cope with ordinary and basic things, let alone developing their country. Instead, to me, government should focus on university students and spend much money on them, because it is more likely to result in better consequences.
Moreover, university students play important roles in our society. Although we should not ignore very young children, but we should pay more attention to university students in order to harvest their skills and experiences for building a modern and progressed country. For instance, we all know nowadays global warming is an important issue, which all the scientists and researchers make efforts to resolve this problem. What can each government do in order to find a best solution is exploiting a precious force in each community, university students, who are the most valuable and worthy potential in every society. So, to utilize this young and energetic force, government should spend more money on them and devote a certain budget to enable students to work and research on global warming and find the best solution.
In general, although young children education's importance is undeniable, but what is more effective and influential in each society's development is university students.
- TPO 44 integrated writing skill 80
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- TPO 35 integrated writing skill 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 466, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...can each government do in order to find a best solution is exploiting a precious ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, second, so, still, therefore, thus, for instance, i think, in general, such as, in other words, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2053.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27763496144 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8462099901 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498714652956 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 648.9 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.0298620231 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.642857143 100.406767564 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7857142857 20.6045352989 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 5.45110844103 183% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.424587809797 0.236089414692 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.164345390499 0.076458572812 215% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.160804366207 0.0737576698707 218% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.276326924043 0.150856017488 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10765394853 0.0645574589148 167% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 11.7677419355 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 58.1214874552 61% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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