You play sport e g football for a local team You recently heard that a player in your team is in a hospital Write a letter to your team mate In your letter Say how you feel about the news Ask about the treatment in the hospital Suggest some ways of cheeri

Essay topics:

You play sport (e.g. football) for a local team. You recently heard that a player in your team is in a hospital.

Write a letter to your team-mate. In your letter:

Say how you feel about the news

Ask about the treatment in the hospital

Suggest some ways of cheering him/her up

Dear Jack,

How are you feeling?

I’m so sorry to hear about your sport accident. I’m just writing to convey my wishes and check on your welbeing.

I was devastated when I got a call from our coach Max, that you had tripped on the football and twisted your foot. I am saddened to hear that the fall fractured one of your toes, and you had to be rushed in to an operation. I am also am so unhappy that this terrible incident took place during the last practice, which I had to miss as I had a meeting at work.

I had called the coach to check on your health, when he told me that you will make a full recovery, but they placed a screw in the toe to mend the bone. I am so glad to hear this news, even if it means you can’t play with us for a while. I also heard that, since this was a simple procedure, you will only need three months of physotherepy. That means you can join us in time for our the champoionship tournament s in summer.

I know it all seems gloomy, and you must be highly bored while on bed rest, but luckily for you, the next season of Big Brother starts this Friday. I know you are a big fan of that show! I was also wondering, maybe while you recover, you could help the coach take the extra practice sessions, so you don’t miss out on the learnings.

I can’t wait to see you out on the field soon, either playing or coaching.

Best wishes,
Jay

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Dear Jack, How are you feeling? I’m so sorry t...
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Dear Jack, How are you feeling? I’m so sorry to hear about your sport ac...
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...y my wishes and check on your welbeing. I was devastated when I got a call from ...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
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...s and check on your welbeing. I was devastated when I got a call from o...
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Line 9, column 116, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
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... on the football and twisted your foot. I am saddened to hear that the fall fract...
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...ou had to be rushed in to an operation. I am also am so unhappy that this terribl...
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...be rushed in to an operation. I am also am so unhappy that this terrible incident ...
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...had to miss as I had a meeting at work. I had called the coach to check on your ...
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...s as I had a meeting at work. I had called the coach to check on your h...
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...ed a screw in the toe to mend the bone. I am so glad to hear this news, even if i...
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...ans you can’t play with us for a while. I also heard that, since this was a simpl...
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...e champoionship tournament s in summer. I know it all seems gloomy, and you must...
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... I know you are a big fan of that show! I was also wondering, maybe while you rec...
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...so you don’t miss out on the learnings. I can’t wait to see you out on the field...
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...’t miss out on the learnings. I can’t wait to see you out on the field ...
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...field soon, either playing or coaching. Best wishes, Jay
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...ying or coaching. Best wishes, Jay
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...coaching. Best wishes, Jay
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 3.03092783505 330% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 55.0 32.9175257732 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 26.3917525773 121% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1148.0 937.175257732 122% => OK
No of words: 271.0 206.0 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.23616236162 4.54256449028 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 3.78020617076 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.21490142442 2.54303337028 87% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 127.690721649 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.583025830258 0.622605031667 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 323.1 290.88556701 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.41237113402 85% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.13402061856 175% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.463917525773 862% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5497037334 44.8134815571 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.0 76.5299724578 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3571428571 16.8248392259 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.07142857143 4.34317383033 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 18.0 2.54639175258 707% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 1.49484536082 334% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27136931306 0.216113520407 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102576028295 0.0766984524023 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0523651837161 0.0603063233224 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168062283967 0.12726935374 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0606246546249 0.0580467560999 104% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 8.37731958763 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 86.03 70.7449484536 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 7.45979381443 80% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.31 8.71597938144 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.68 7.59969072165 88% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 41.2886597938 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 8.62886597938 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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