Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
I agree with the proposed statement. Personally speaking, helping the community must be one part of people's lives, but it is not. Young people also do not consider some times to help their communities. I will mention some points, reasons, and my experience to defend my opinion below.
First, In my mind, young people nowadays even do not think about helping people because they are busy playing computer games or hanging on with their friends in their free time. When anything young people want their parents to prepare for them, they will never understand poor people who do not even have the necessary things in their lives. For example, I have a friend who has a young boy named Tom. My friend every day goes to her boy's school to return him to their house. After that, in the evening, Tom's friends come to his house to play games on his computer. Even this, one day I went with Tom shopping, and when we were coming back. I saw an old woman who had a difficult time carrying her pockets. She attracted my attention, but Tom did not even see her until I said to him to help the old woman. Tom is a very good boy, but I think that the luxurious life his parents preparing for him caused him does not understand such things.
Second, life nowadays is complex than in the past. The government is responsible to help the community. As a result, young people do not feel the responsibility to help their communities. For example, my son always asks me some questions about old men and women, and I always tell him that they live in a specific house where the government runs it. So, he will be relieved, as do I.
To sum up, according to what I mentioned, I think today's life is changed, and young people do not see many people who need help, or they do not understand them.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 383, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ns it. So, he will be relieved, as do I. To sum up, according to what I mentioned...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, for example, i think, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1450.0 1977.66487455 73% => OK
No of words: 327.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.43425076453 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39356764729 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.544342507645 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 441.0 618.680645161 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.826907077 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.3157894737 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2105263158 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.10526315789 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27026763614 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0941932056962 0.076458572812 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.094534482851 0.0737576698707 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189247829376 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0352719607626 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 11.7677419355 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 79.6 58.1214874552 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.12 10.9000537634 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.04 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 86.8835125448 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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