Topic: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better for young people to select a job in the same field as their parents than to choose a different career for themselves.
Some people think that it is preferable for young people to choose a different type of job than their parents did. However, in my opinion, people have more advantages if they work in the same field as their parents since they can get more helpful advice from their parents and they can utilize their parents’ professional contacts.
To begin with, young people can receive helpful advice from their parents when they face up with some difficulties that they have never experienced before. Because both of their jobs are in the same field, parents must have experienced the same challenges, which their son or daughter experiencing now, when they were a novice twenty years ago. Therefore, with their work experience, they can provide valuable tips and directions to their children. For example, one of my friends who is a teacher now, got advisable tips from their parents. At the first time when she became a teacher, every single task is overwhelming to her. Among the things, she suffered from controlling her naughty students the most. Then, her parents suggested that she make a strict rule and enforce it consistently, and she embraced it right away. As a result, her students’ behavior improved a lot and she could solve the problem quickly.
On top of that, young people can make use of their parents’ professional connections in their business. They can utilize their parents’ work-related contacts to form a business partnership. Take the example of Bill Gates, he could make his first noteworthy success which was to make business cooperation with IBM. IBM hired his company, Microsoft, to develop software for IBM’s computer. Thanks to his mother, Bill Gates could get this huge opportunity. Because his mother has professional connections to one of the directors in IBM, she recommends his son’s company to a broad member of IBM.
To sum up, it is preferable for young people to select a job in the same field as their parents, because they are able to not only get useful guidelines but also get professional connections. In this regard, I propose that young people choose occupation in the same field as their parents.
- Topic People in the past ate better food for their health than they do nowadays 87
- Caring for a pet is the best way for a child to learn responsibility 81
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Nowadays people are more willing to help people they don t know for example by giving clothing and food to people who need them than they were in the past Use specific reasons and examples to support y 86
- Caring for a pet is the best way for a child to learn responsibility 3
- Topic Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is better for young people to select a job in the same field as their parents than to choose a different career for themselves 80
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, then, therefore, as to, for example, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1803.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 358.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03631284916 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.721182256 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525139664804 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 540.9 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.5303450129 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.166666667 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8888888889 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.77777777778 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278115392741 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0963175201178 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0989658769458 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207095648519 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0856087479227 0.0645574589148 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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