Shopping is the favorite pastime for most of the young people. Why do you think is that? Do you think they should be encouraged to do some useful activities in their free time?
Shopping has become an integral part of our life. Young people are more attracted to this habit than older people and it has almost become their favorite hobby. While there are many reasons attributed to this habit such as increased spending power and peer influences, some people argue that they should be encouraged to spend their time wisely in other useful activities and I completely agree with that because time is the most precious thing in the world.
For one thing, the increased spending power is one of the main reasons for this addiction to shopping in our society. Compared to the past, there are many job opportunities available in the market and most of them are ready to pay fat paychecks. Our young people now have plenty of disposable income they don’t know how to spend.
Secondly, they are easily getting influenced by their peers who might be doing window shopping almost every week, for no reasons. The recent survey conducted by SurveyMonkey.com on Bayshore Shopping Mall business in Kanata city, indicates that majority of their sales are coming from younger people who had just started their career..
Having said that, some people argue that our young society needs to be diverted and encouraged to spend their free time in more better and useful ways. I strongly agree with that, because the only thing that cannot be retrieved back is “the time”. Instead of spending time in shopping malls, we should encourage them to involve in physical activities such as sports and games. Or they can join a course that enhances their skill sets. For instance, those in the software field can spend their time in learning Artificial Intelligence which is growing very fast in today’s market.
In conclusion, while it is true that young people are getting attracted towards frequent shopping, they should be encouraged to spend their free time more wisely on activities that could help them to lead a more comfortable and healthy life.
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| 2020-12-27 | Eslam Mobarak | 73 | view |
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 333, Rule ID: DOUBLE_PUNCTUATION
Message: Two consecutive dots
Suggestion: .
...people who had just started their career.. Having said that, some people argue ...
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Line 7, column 124, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'better' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: better
... encouraged to spend their free time in more better and useful ways. I strongly agree with ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, for one thing, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1642.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 328.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00609756098 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45533418757 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539634146341 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 497.7 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.9076348121 49.4020404114 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.285714286 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4285714286 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.21428571429 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.325031277739 0.244688304435 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105318377124 0.084324248473 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0615579551341 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177272055107 0.151304729494 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0460985296781 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 333, Rule ID: DOUBLE_PUNCTUATION
Message: Two consecutive dots
Suggestion: .
...people who had just started their career.. Having said that, some people argue ...
^^
Line 7, column 124, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'better' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: better
... encouraged to spend their free time in more better and useful ways. I strongly agree with ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, for one thing, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1642.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 328.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00609756098 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45533418757 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539634146341 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 497.7 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.9076348121 49.4020404114 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.285714286 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4285714286 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.21428571429 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.325031277739 0.244688304435 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105318377124 0.084324248473 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0615579551341 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177272055107 0.151304729494 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0460985296781 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.