The availability of entertainment such as video games on handheld devices is harmful to the individual and to the society they live in. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In an age of Industrialization and globalization, people usually have to deal with high pressure from a professional working environment, so that finding a way of entertaining is certainly a crucial need for everyone and mobile video game is among the choices. Many people believe that this type of entertainment is harmful to people and society. From my point of view, I agree that video games on handheld devices have some obvious drawbacks but their advantages are undeniable.
On the one hand, I truly believe that playing video games is a good way of relaxing. First, games on handheld devices such as smartphones, tablets, … can be brought anywhere and they are especially suitable for being play during a short break which you cannot take part in any physical activities. This is the main reason why many people choose to spend their time on games. Second, playing the mobile game can also broaden your knowledge in some particular ways or you can even widen your network and improve your communication skill by playing MOBA mobile games such as League of Legends.
On the other hand, I am convinced that without being dealt with appropriately, mobile games can cause bad effects such as short-sighted eyes or time-consuming. It is scientifically proved that spending more than three hours a day staring at a phone’s screen can harm your eyes. Besides, being addicted to games also lowers your productivity. For example, when playing a game, I usually lose my focus on time and end up getting distracted from my work, thus I have to turn off the phone to avoid wasting time.
In conclusion, there are some irrefutable drawbacks of playing mobile video games but I believe that by handling them properly, they can absolutely bring benefit.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, second, so, thus, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1467.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98979591837 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89734631506 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595238095238 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 456.3 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.1809193645 49.4020404114 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.25 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.58333333333 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194464357231 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0734869450954 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0481063915373 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120501546393 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0412414004248 0.056905535591 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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