Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
While it is true that students after the so-called student evaluation procedure have significantly showed increase in grades, the authors argument is still not cogent of how current graduates aren't securing jobs and author’s assumption about fall in job offers from potential employers is because of the 15-year-old procedure. It is obvious that why the recruiters won't offer jobs to omega university students and invest somewhere better like the alpha university.
According to a survey in Boston, students of different generations respond better towards new style of teaching changed every 6 years. Omega University is still using the robust teaching style. For instance, this style may not be one of the best ones required for building of theoretical and practical knowledge of a student. He/she may secure higher grades through studying only theoretically through the robust style but today practical implementation is equally important in most of the graduate fields. The author requests to stop the evaluation procedure that is in omega university for 15 years, why wasn’t it proposed earlier? When was this problem recognized and was it dealed before?
Author claims that it is been seen that the professors assign higher grades to students and on an average a 30 % rise in the score has been seen since. Certain things in these claims have been assumed by the author in order to support his/her argument. One being, Professors have been completely honest with their grading system and have all done in a transparent manner. Moreover, the details of sample space like no. Of students is not mentioned which may affect the result. For example, the exam would have been simple when the students took a test and the average rose up. Were all students included while averaging scores? What is the 30% comparison made with?
The Author fails to give background data of Omega and Alpha Universities specifically their graduates’ performances and job hiring to prove his/her point. Due to sudden increase in the scores and the achievements of the students the credibility is at stake. Whereas it is quite reflected that the fall in potential employers hiring at Omega and rise in that at Alpa is completely due to the inflated scores whereas this can't be only the reason for the shift. The interviews might have been better of Alpha university graduates than that of Omega. Students at Alpha tend to have more cultivated mind sets than that of Omega due to reasons like Versatile Teaching Facilities. Focused studies, projects and many other factors help get potential employers to the university.
For these reasons, Omega may decide to change and improvise on their teaching styles. However, this author's argument with stated flaws is not likely to significantly blame the Evaluation Program for the down side of the Omega University.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 13 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 468 350
No. of Characters: 2335 1500
No. of Different Words: 244 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.651 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.989 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.658 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 171 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 123 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 92 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 60 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.348 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.448 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.435 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.283 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.493 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.089 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 131, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ficantly showed increase in grades, the authors argument is still not cogent of how cur...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 193, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: aren't
...ill not cogent of how current graduates arent securing jobs and author’s assumption a...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 348, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a transparent manner" with adverb for "transparent"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... their grading system and have all done in a transparent manner. Moreover, the details of sample space ...
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Line 5, column 667, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...? What is the 30% comparison made with? The Author fails to give background data...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 132, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'proving'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'hire' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: proving
... graduates’ performances and job hiring to prove his/her point. Due to sudden increase i...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 421, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...due to the inflated scores whereas this cant be only the reason for the shift. The i...
^^^^
Line 9, column 204, Rule ID: DOWN_SIDE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'downside'?
Suggestion: downside
...ly blame the Evaluation Program for the down side of the Omega University.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, whereas, while, for example, for instance, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2392.0 2260.96107784 106% => OK
No of words: 462.0 441.139720559 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17748917749 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72218439275 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 204.123752495 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515151515152 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 747.0 705.55239521 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 61.2348478991 57.8364921388 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.6666666667 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.25 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.04166666667 5.70786347227 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307261372867 0.218282227539 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0821834216368 0.0743258471296 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0544360301652 0.0701772020484 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159516344511 0.128457276422 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0219405476987 0.0628817314937 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.32208582834 108% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 98.500998004 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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