Women are better at childcare than men therefore they should focus more on raising children and less on their working life.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Although the care of children has traditionally been the role of women, nowadays many men have decided to stay at home to raise children while the woman in the family goes to work. However, some people believe that women have a natural ability for childcare and this role should be left to them. I disagree with this for the following reasons.
Firstly, both men and women have qualities which are important for bringing up and educating children. These qualities are not specific to men or women, therefore both genders are able to raise children successfully. By saying that childcare is a specific female role, children will receive a message which portrays women as carers only. For example, young girls who are taught to believe that the place of women is in the home may not try hard in school subjects which are more male dominated, such as science.
Secondly, the role of women in the workplace has changed significantly in the last fifty years. Many women now hold senior positions in many areas of employment. Women contribute a range of skills to the workplace which are both valuable and important. In my opinion, women should continue to focus on their careers and ensure that their daughters are aware of the opportunities which are available to them in life. Men should also take on some of the responsibility of childcare and teach their sons that this is a valuable role in society for men as well as women.
In conclusion, it is important that men and women share childcare duties because both genders have important qualities and skills. However, women and men should also be allowed to focus on their careers and provide strong role models for children.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 435, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...to them in life Men should also take on some of the responsibility of childcare and teach t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1371.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 287.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77700348432 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48190283613 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 176.041082164 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477351916376 0.561755894193 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 444.6 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 16.0721442886 6% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 287.0 20.2975951904 1414% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 49.4020404114 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1371.0 106.682146367 1285% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 287.0 20.7667163134 1382% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 153.0 7.06120827912 2167% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287553009039 0.244688304435 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.287553009039 0.084324248473 341% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667982634062 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189373530745 0.151304729494 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0268214028388 0.056905535591 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 144.6 13.0946893788 1104% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -211.37 50.2224549098 -421% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.44779559118 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 114.0 11.3001002004 1009% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.92 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 20.73 8.58950901804 241% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 52.0 78.4519038076 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 55.0 9.78957915832 562% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 116.8 10.1190380762 1154% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 117.0 10.7795591182 1085% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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