When Stanley Park first opened, it was the largest, most heavily used public park in town. It is still the largest park, but it is no longer heavily used. Video cameras mounted in the park's parking lots last month revealed the park's drop in popularity: the recordings showed an average of only 50 cars per day. In contrast, tiny Carlton Park in the heart of the business district is visited by more than 150 people on a typical weekday. An obvious difference is that Carlton Park, unlike Stanley Park, provides ample seating. Thus, if Stanley Park is ever to be as popular with our citizens as Carlton Park, the town will obviously need to provide more benches, thereby converting some of the unused open areas into spaces suitable for socializing.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
In the prompt, it is argued that for Stanley park to be as famous as Carlton Park, it needs to have more seating accommodation for the visitors, It is said that it can be done by changing the unsed spaces to places where poeple can socialize and adding new benches to the park. These assumptions are drawn on the experiences and observations of Carlton Park, and the less number of people has been attributed to lesser number of cars recorded by the parking lot cameras. However, if these assumptions prove unwarranted the arguement will cripple and fall flat on it's face.
Stanley Park is compared to Carlton park which is located in the heart of the city, It has been assumed that both the parks are roughy comparable. It may be that Stanley park is located in a scarcely populated area on the outskirts compared to Carlton Park located in the business district of the town. People may not like to travel to outskirts of the town to visit a park and rather enjoy their lunch break in a park during work. It is stated that Stanley park is larger in area compared to Carlton park, so even having equal number of people in both the parks, Carlton park will look crowded compared to Stanley Park. These assumptions, If proved correct weaken the prompt.
The less number of people in people in Stanley Park has been attributed to lack of benches in the it, compared to Carlton park. People may come to Stanley Park to walk their dogs and play outdoor sports like frisbee and baseball and not sit and socialize, adding benches does not guarantee that more people will come to the park, if instead new activities and sports equipments are added to the park it may attract younger crowd and budding sportsmen. It maybe that people visit Carlton Park on weekdays only to have a leisure time during their breaks and have a nice outdooe breeze. Adding new benches to Stanley park doesn't ensure more people coming as it is not located in the same place. If one can provide evidence of these assumptions the above prompt will be highly weakened.
The method of recording number of people is not fixed in both the parks, It's stated that 150 people visit Carlton park everyday and 50 cars on average are shown in the parking lot of Stanley Park. It is assumed that a single person is in each vehicle and no one comes to the park on foot or by bikes. This strongly weakens the fact the more people don't come to Stanley Park compared to Carlton Park on weekdays.
Hence, if the following unstated assumptions prove false the prompt will be greatly weakened. If these assumptions prove unwarranted there is no need of adding more benches to Stanley Park as no fixed method of counting visiting people has been implemented and a accuarte count of people using benches has been shown. There is no evidence given that everyone who visits the park sits on benches and doesn't do any other activity.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 9 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 12 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 517 350
No. of Characters: 2329 1500
No. of Different Words: 204 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.768 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.505 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.309 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 165 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 109 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 54 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 27 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.211 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.059 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.474 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.399 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.573 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.096 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 668, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ions If proved correct weaken the prompt The less number of people in people in S...
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Line 5, column 20, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'people in'.
Suggestion: people in
...eaken the prompt The less number of people in people in Stanley Park has been attributed to lac...
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Line 5, column 95, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'it'?
Suggestion: the; it
...s been attributed to lack of benches in the it compared to Carlton park People may com...
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Line 5, column 614, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...eeze Adding new benches to Stanley park doesnt ensure more people coming as it is not ...
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Line 7, column 119, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...ated that 150 people visit Carlton park everyday and 50 cars on average are shown in the...
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Line 7, column 346, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...rongly weakens the fact the more people dont come to Stanley Park compared to Carlto...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...compared to Carlton Park on weekdays Hence if the following unstated assumptions p...
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Line 9, column 260, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...isiting people has been implemented and a accuarte count of people using benches ...
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Line 9, column 397, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...who visits the park sits on benches and doesnt do any other activity
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, look, may, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 55.5748502994 126% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2347.0 2260.96107784 104% => OK
No of words: 514.0 441.139720559 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.56614785992 5.12650576532 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76146701107 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30298346384 2.78398813304 83% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 204.123752495 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.375486381323 0.468620217663 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 728.1 705.55239521 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 19.7664670659 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 514.0 22.8473053892 2250% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 57.8364921388 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 2347.0 119.503703932 1964% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 514.0 23.324526521 2204% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 38.0 5.70786347227 666% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 8.20758483034 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.404103536028 0.218282227539 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.404103536028 0.0743258471296 544% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0701772020484 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.288719875817 0.128457276422 225% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0920674422464 0.0628817314937 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 257.1 14.3799401198 1788% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -433.31 48.3550499002 -896% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.1628742515 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 201.4 12.197005988 1651% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 10.71 12.5979740519 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 31.5 8.32208582834 379% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 77.0 98.500998004 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 56.0 12.3882235529 452% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 207.6 11.1389221557 1864% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 56.0 11.9071856287 470% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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