The chart below shows information about Heart Attacks by Age and Gender in USA.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
You should write at least 150 words.
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task
the bar chart compares the figures of Americans having heart attacks on a yearly basis based on genders and age groups.
I can be seen that the risk of heart attack increases as people grow older and men are prone to gave heart attacks than of women.
Looking at the information in more detail, we can see that people in the age range of 29-44 have the lowest rate of heart attacks. On average, heart attacks among males are 123 thousand whereas the figures recorded for females are 3 thousand each year. However, the 45-64 age group experienced a dramatic growth. While there are 424 thousand men who suffer heart attacks a year, the similar medical situation in women was lower threefold, with 136 thousand cases.
The rate for the oldest age group which consists of people aged 65 or over reaches to its highest point, with the figures for male and female reaching 440 and 434 thousand, respectively.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
the bar chart compares the figures of Ameri...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, look, whereas, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 33.7804878049 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 756.0 965.302439024 78% => OK
No of words: 159.0 196.424390244 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75471698113 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.55098862472 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3003053302 2.65546596893 87% => OK
Unique words: 104.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.654088050314 0.547539520022 119% => OK
syllable_count: 224.1 283.868780488 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.3420602751 43.030603864 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.0 112.824112599 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7142857143 22.9334400587 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.14285714286 5.23603664747 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 1.13902439024 439% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123176096162 0.215688989381 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0620411938327 0.103423049105 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0351946365914 0.0843802449381 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0806959501968 0.15604864568 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0331774356505 0.0819641961636 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.2329268293 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 61.2550243902 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 11.4140731707 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.06136585366 107% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 40.7170731707 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
the bar chart compares the figures of Ameri...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, look, whereas, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 33.7804878049 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 756.0 965.302439024 78% => OK
No of words: 159.0 196.424390244 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75471698113 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.55098862472 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3003053302 2.65546596893 87% => OK
Unique words: 104.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.654088050314 0.547539520022 119% => OK
syllable_count: 224.1 283.868780488 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.3420602751 43.030603864 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.0 112.824112599 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7142857143 22.9334400587 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.14285714286 5.23603664747 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 1.13902439024 439% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123176096162 0.215688989381 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0620411938327 0.103423049105 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0351946365914 0.0843802449381 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0806959501968 0.15604864568 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0331774356505 0.0819641961636 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.2329268293 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 61.2550243902 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 11.4140731707 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.06136585366 107% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 40.7170731707 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.