The chart below shows information about Heart Attacks by Age and Gender in USA.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graphs elucidate the information about the number of heart attacks in USA within three age groups; 29-44, 45-64 and over 65 and by its gender.
It is apparent that the number of heart attacks increases as time goes. Interestingly, there was a higher number of heart attacks for men than those for women. It is noticeable that, the number of heart attacks for seniors, who are over 65 years old, showed no great difference to the people with 45 to 64 of age.
Men with ages of more than 65 experienced the most heart attacks as it reached its highest record of 440,000. This number is similar to men with 45-64 years old (424,000). Younger males of 123,000 people experienced the least heart attacks.
In contrast, women had lesser heart attacks than those of men. About 374,000 senior females went to a hospital for heart attacks, while 136,000 females and 3 females had heart attacks, with 45-64 age group and 29-44 age group, respectively. Females in their early 30s and 40s had the lowest recorded for heart attacks.
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It is noticeable that, the number of heart attacks for seniors, who are over 65 years old, showed no great difference to the people with 45 to 64 of age.
Men with ages of more than 65 experienced the most heart attacks as it reached its highest record of 440,000. This number is similar to men with 45-64 years old (424,000).
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