The tufted groundhog lives in the coastal wetlands of West Lansburg. Ancient records suggest that the tufted groundhog once numbered in the millions. Since they were declared a wildlife sanctuary in 2004, development along the coastal wetlands has been prohibited. Now local development interests are lobbying for the west Lansburg council to allow an access road to be built along the edge of wetlands. Neighbouring Eastern carpenteria, which had a similar sanctuary, has seen its sea otter population decline since the repeal of its sanctuary status in 1978. To preserve the region's biodiversity and ensure a healthy environment, the West Lansburg council should not allow the road to be built.
In the letter to the editor for the West Lansburg News, the author comes to a conclusion that: "To preserve the region's biodiversity and ensure a healthy environment, the West Lansburg council should not allow the road to be built." But, the argument presented by the author is brimming with unsubstantiated assumptions and loopholes. The argument stays unwarranted until the argument gets backed up by strong and empirical shreds of evidence.
Illuminating loophole number 1: "Are sea otters and tufted groundhogs comparable?" In other words, the lifespan, adaptability, food intake, etc differ from one animal to other. For instance, sea otters may require just a ton of fish every day, but tufted groundhogs may need way more. The answer to the above question is unobtrusive from the above argument. As long as the author doesn't corroborate the argument with necessary substantiation, the argument stays invalid and flaccid.
Brightening up loophole number 2: "Are the climatic conditions in West Lansburg and Eastern Carpenteria similar?" In other words, the former may be cooler than the latter. For example, tufted groundhogs require higher temperatures to survive with salubriousness, sea otters may require cold climatic conditions to survive well. In simple words, sea otters might have declined because of the increase in temperatures in Eastern Carpenteria. Since the answer to the above questions is not evident, the author has to adduce necessary pieces of evidence.
Igniting loophole number 3: "How come the author is so sure that not building a road ensures a healthy environment?" In other words, a healthy environment doesn't just rely on building a road, it does depend on several other factors such as air pollution rate, fluorocarbons, deforestation, etc. The answer to the above question is obfuscate. So, until the answer is not supported with necessary shreds of premises, the argument stays unwarranted.
In conclusion, preserving the region's biodiversity and brimming a healthy environment may be possible if the road is not allowed to be built. But, the argument stays loopholed until the author corroborates his answers to the above-asked questions with statistical and empirical shreds of evidence.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 14 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 350 350
No. of Characters: 1823 1500
No. of Different Words: 166 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.325 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.209 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.981 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 146 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 106 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.444 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.588 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.556 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.339 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.544 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.053 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
'Purest form of music is regardless...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...pos; because of the imminent reasons. My most dissension towards the prompt is...
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Line 2, column 61, Rule ID: I_AM[1]
Message: Did you mean 'I am'?
Suggestion: I am
...issension towards the prompt is because I being an amateurish musician, strongly ...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... most sought-after paintings on Earth. I also believe: Under the firmament, Nat...
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Line 3, column 246, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'musicians'' or 'musician's'?
Suggestion: musicians'; musician's
...ays timeless and spaceless. Moreover, a musicians fame among the people consummately depe...
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Line 3, column 407, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'A musician' or simply 'musicians'?
Suggestion: A musician; Musicians
... occasion why the song was played, etc. A musicians good tune solely doesnt spike his music...
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Line 3, column 436, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ayed, etc. A musicians good tune solely doesnt spike his musical popularity; the fame ...
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Line 3, column 533, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...kets because of the lyrics, singer, etc. In conclusion, there may be people who m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, really, so, still, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 58.6224719101 65% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1589.0 2235.4752809 71% => OK
No of words: 313.0 442.535393258 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07667731629 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87180365551 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 215.323595506 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.61661341853 0.4932671777 125% => OK
syllable_count: 498.6 704.065955056 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.277234013 60.3974514979 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.230769231 118.986275619 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0769230769 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.76923076923 5.21951772744 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.350605632944 0.243740707755 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102640845487 0.0831039109588 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.146775307537 0.0758088955206 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196862533206 0.150359130593 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.127512760244 0.0667264976115 191% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 100.480337079 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.8971910112 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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