Many manufactured food and drink products contain high level of sugar, which cause may health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.
Do you agree or disagree?
Consumption of a particularly substantial quantity of sugar which is included in some food and drink may result in various health problems such as obesity or high blood level constituting the precursor of diabetes. There is a suggestion to reduce the expenditure of sugar that the price of sugary products should be increased. As far as I am concerned, I do not concur with this statement because of two following reasons.
In fact, sugar is one of the integral ingredients in the daily meal as it provides plenty of energy that activates several systems as well as muscle in humans. In other words, sugary products bring benefits to human health. Therefore, the price of sugar should be at a plausible level to ensure that individuals can afford them. Moreover, sugary products are not only a source of energy but also necessary for the growth of the body, especially in children. For instance, it is encouraged for children as well as teenagers to drink milk since it triggers the development of the immune system.
What is more? As long as sugary products were expensive, poverty cannot afford them. As a consequence, they suffer from the devoid of essential nutrients, which leads to severe problems such as malnutrition and the short of energy. In other words, they are not strong enough to do their tasks and their productivity decreases as well. In particular, those jobs requiring physical exertion such as construction workers or bricklayers whose allowance is quite low need plenty of energy so sugary products, a tremendous source of energy, should be affordable.
In conclusion, sugar is such a vital ingredient that it is had better distributed to every individual. Therefore, people should propose alternative solutions to reduce the consumption of sugar rather than increase the price of this basic ingredient.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, may, moreover, so, therefore, well, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, in particular, such as, as well as, in other words, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1529.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 300.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09666666667 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92986727041 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 485.1 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.2645407731 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.933333333 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.93333333333 7.06120827912 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31866389409 0.244688304435 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0956326562113 0.084324248473 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0621621522842 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18138031069 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0724133288566 0.056905535591 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.