Studies suggest that many teenagers these days prefer socialising online to meeting one another in person.
Why do you think this is the case?
What measures could be taken to encourage teenagers to spend more time meeting one another in person?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
It is argued that adolescence nowadys would rather interact with people online than see them in real life. This essay shall focus on explaining the grounds for such issue and then submit a viable solution to motivate the youth to pay less attention on social networks.
The foremost cause of this concern is the convenience of technology development. Due to the benefit from Internet usage, young generation become lazier to get out of their houses, instead, they would prefer to stay in their place, turn on their high-tech accessories whenever they want communicate with others. Therefore, the ratio of teenagers suffer from health problems (such as: myopic, backache, spinal disc hernation and so on) shall increase in the near future. According to VnExpress news, in 2020, the percentage of youth suffering from back problems has risen to about 10% comparing to the previous year due to the fact that they had spent more than 8 hours sitting in front of the computer.
A possible solution to this issue would be encouragement from the government. To prevent adolescence from the drawbacks of spending too much time surfing the Internet, the government should motivate them to hang out and practice out-door exercises with others. Such solution not only help them improve their health and reduce the time they spend on the Internet, but also tighten the relationship between citizens in a community.
In conclusion, the proportion of youth tending to use social networks to hang out online seems to be a challenging problem in every country, but a viable solution is that the government could encourage adolescence to see others in really life rather than via Internet. It is also predicted that more and more countries will be forced to take such measure to avoid the mentioned problem.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, really, so, then, therefore, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1502.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07432432432 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67600837407 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577702702703 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 451.8 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.4652758761 49.4020404114 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.545454545 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9090909091 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 7.06120827912 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0919979070039 0.244688304435 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0386810337886 0.084324248473 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0248355234797 0.0667982634062 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0574479766991 0.151304729494 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0267066942223 0.056905535591 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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