Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.
People have different views about what is the best way to help people improve their health. Providing more sports facilities is suggested as the best way to balance one’s well-being by some people, while the others advocate that more measures must be included. From my perspective , I support the latter in the belief that psychology and a healthy diet will also play a crucial role.
On the one hand, sports as we are all familiar with, have lots of benefits on our physical health. Having a fit and muscled body, boosting self-confidence and enhancing teamwork are the most popular advantages of sports so it understandable that sports facilities are now put in parks or at school without charging any penny to encourage people to take exercises on a regular basic. Statistically speaking, people who do sports regularly are proved to have less chances of coming down with common but serious diseases such as influenza or a sore throat. Therefore, when this plan is enacted together with the beneficial and economical advantages of sports, public health will be optimized.
On the other hand, the government must take the social and emotional life of each individual into account. People cannot take enough exercises like going to the gym or go jogging every morning when they have to deal with a heavy workload every day at work or coping with excessive demand from the company to fulfil a need of the growth in the national economy. Therefore, the best solution is to reduce the working hours to allow people to have time to take care of themselves as well as their families. Furthermore, a basic understanding of how bad the influence is if people don’t take enough workout should also be provided by organizing health campaigns, broadcasting more programs about human well-being and diets on TV are recommended to ensure that everyone receives the fair treatment.
In conclusion, although increasing sports facilities is highly encouraged as it creates motivation for people to be more aware of their health, I want to put greater emphasis on the other measures to guarantee that the public health is always developing at good rate.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 281, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...es must be included. From my perspective , I support the latter in the belief that...
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Line 2, column 458, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun chances is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
... do sports regularly are proved to have less chances of coming down with common but ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, so, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, such as, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1788.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 357.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00840336134 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7755019824 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.593837535014 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 564.3 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.3974370326 49.4020404114 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.0 106.682146367 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.75 20.7667163134 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.08333333333 7.06120827912 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283247727202 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102697201173 0.084324248473 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0763773547537 0.0667982634062 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187639553231 0.151304729494 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0660586015401 0.056905535591 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 13.0946893788 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 50.2224549098 84% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.37 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.28 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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