The following appeared in an editorial in a local newspaper.
"Commuters complain that increased rush-hour traffic on Blue Highway between the suburbs and the city center has doubled their commuting time. The favored proposal of the motorists' lobby is to widen the highway, adding an additional lane of traffic. Opponents note that last year's addition of a lane to the nearby Green Highway was followed by a worsening of traffic jams on it. Their suggested alternative proposal is adding a bicycle lane to Blue Highway. Many area residents are keen bicyclists. A bicycle lane would encourage them to use bicycles to commute, it is argued, thereby reducing rush-hour traffic."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
While the argument has some merit, such as recommendations for the traffic problem on Blue Highway, its line of reasoning requires close examination and certain important questions need to be answered in order for these recommendations to be considered.
To begin with, the given article states how commuters have recently been complaining about the rush-hour traffic on Blue Highway for their commute from the suburbs and the city, the author states that the motorists lobby of this set of commuters suggests that the road be widened by adding an additional lane to the highway. The main question to be answered here is , Are there enough funds with the city council for such a project?, if no, are the motorist’s willing to provide an alternative solution to this problem. The statistics about the funds allocated to the Roads and Highways would strengthen the argument and the suggestion made by the motorists might be one point of consideration. Moreover , the term “motorists lobby” is a very vague term and does not indicate actually how many people are in favor of this suggestion, for instance the statistics such as 10 in every 100 people are in the favor might add a plausible connotation to this favor.
Secondly, author talks about motorist lobby and the opponents they have in this case, who state that the addition of one extra lane to the Green Highway last year has worsened the traffic problems. Do the opponents make a valid point in this argument?, if yes we would need additional information to support this claim, such as the data and numbers showing us the contrast in the size of traffic jams before and after the an extra lane was built on the Green Highway. This additional data would weaken the motorists' suggestion considerably. In addition to the suggestion by the opponents, Are Blue Highway and Green Highway the same ? do they have the same kind of traffic rush ? are the commuters traversing on these highways of the same kind ?, are the questions that need answers to for the argument to be reasonable.
Further more, the alternative suggestion made by the opponents is adding a bicycle lane to the Blue Highway, as many area residents are keen bicyclists. To support this claim the author needs to provide evidence for the questions such as, How many residents are keen bicyclists ? Do they commute from this highway on bicycles often?. If more than half of the residents use bicycles for commuting, then building a lane dedicated to bicycles can be a valid suggestion. In addition , instead of making sweeping assumptions, the author needs o provide answers for the question , such as Are any of these bicyclists form the motorist lobby? and against the idea of the bicycle lane addition. Do the residents have pinned bicycling as a hobby ?, in such a case the addition of such a lane the highway would not be a smart decision.
Due to lack of evidence such as , Are there enough funds for the widening of roads suggested by the motorist lobby? Or Does the alternative solution given by opponents have enough evidence to be considered as a suggestion , this argument is not completely persuasive and more research need to ne done before considering any of the sides stated in the argument.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 547 350
No. of Characters: 2611 1500
No. of Different Words: 214 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.836 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.773 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.653 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 167 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 148 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 108 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 64 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 32.176 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.228 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.647 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.346 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.346 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.091 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 283, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ers suggests that the road be widened by adding an additional lane to the highway...
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Line 2, column 285, Rule ID: ADD_AN_ADDITIONAL[1]
Message: This phrase might be redundant. Use simply 'adding a lane'.
Suggestion: adding a lane
...s suggests that the road be widened by adding an additional lane to the highway. The main question to be...
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Line 2, column 366, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...The main question to be answered here is , Are there enough funds with the city co...
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Line 2, column 704, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... be one point of consideration. Moreover , the term “motorists lobby” is a very va...
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Line 3, column 418, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'an' is left.
Suggestion: the; an
...e size of traffic jams before and after the an extra lane was built on the Green Highw...
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Line 3, column 506, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'motorists'' or 'motorist's'?
Suggestion: motorists'; motorist's
.... This additional data would weaken the motorists suggestion considerably. In addition to...
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Line 3, column 635, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Do
...ue Highway and Green Highway the same ? do they have the same kind of traffic rush...
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Line 3, column 680, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Are
...ey have the same kind of traffic rush ? are the commuters traversing on these highw...
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Line 4, column 478, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...s can be a valid suggestion. In addition , instead of making sweeping assumptions,...
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Line 4, column 572, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...needs o provide answers for the question , such as Are any of these bicyclists for...
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Line 4, column 636, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
...ese bicyclists form the motorist lobby? and against the idea of the bicycle lane ad...
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Line 5, column 32, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...cision. Due to lack of evidence such as , Are there enough funds for the widening...
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Line 5, column 118, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...oads suggested by the motorist lobby? Or Does the alternative solution given by o...
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Line 5, column 222, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...vidence to be considered as a suggestion , this argument is not completely persuas...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, while, for instance, in addition, kind of, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 55.5748502994 128% => OK
Nominalization: 30.0 16.3942115768 183% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2679.0 2260.96107784 118% => OK
No of words: 547.0 441.139720559 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89762340037 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83611736076 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76976819571 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 204.123752495 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.413162705667 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 844.2 705.55239521 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.5814704622 57.8364921388 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.95 119.503703932 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.35 23.324526521 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.85 5.70786347227 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.25449101796 266% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175829855647 0.218282227539 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0641000493245 0.0743258471296 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.067319699789 0.0701772020484 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102678110644 0.128457276422 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0794188027106 0.0628817314937 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 48.3550499002 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 12.197005988 103% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 12.3882235529 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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