Some people think government should ban dangerous sports such as skydiving Do you agree or disagree

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Some people think government should ban dangerous sports, such as skydiving. Do you agree or disagree?

The importance of sports which was always debatable has now become more controversial with many people claiming that it is extremely beneficial, while other reject this notion. As far as I am concerned i agree with the given statement for a raft of reasons elaborated in the impending passage.

Analysing the statement and explaining further, the first and foremost reason behind this is, playing such perilous activities like skydiving, wrestling and so no can be harmful for people as well as their future. Moreover, these type of activities can lead to a serious injury. for instance, a famous Television show, world wrestling Entertainment is completely ban in some nations just because of harmful activities that wrestlers doing in order to attain name and fame. As a result, a famous wrestler, The undertaker, was killed while performing these hazardous activity.

Probing ahead, the main underlying reason stems from the fact is that, many innocents were killed while performing these ventures such as, sky diving, scuba diving, rafting and so on. Another striking reason in this regard is that, sometime few individuals forget to wear clothes pertaining to respective ventures. unfortunately, they have to escape from the upcoming hazards. Take an example, a 16-years-old boy was killed while performing para gliding. just because of not wearing additional clothes that activity required.

To conclude, according to the justifications aforementioned above, it can be reiterated that, law makers ought to take a strict verdict regarding these dangerous activities for preserve innocent's life from these sort of Sports.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, moreover, regarding, so, well, while, for instance, sort of, such as, as a result, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1382.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 253.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.46245059289 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98822939669 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94308523344 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.644268774704 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 431.1 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.9184936068 49.4020404114 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.166666667 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0833333333 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.66666666667 7.06120827912 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0855921062234 0.244688304435 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0252959811064 0.084324248473 30% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0304668362129 0.0667982634062 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.048588752017 0.151304729494 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0286265437228 0.056905535591 50% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.48 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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