The pie charts below show the online sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
» Write at least 150 words.
The pie charts in question illustrate the proportion of online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in the years 2003 and 2013. The retail sectors for online sales are travel, film and music, books and clothes.
The first chart represents the total online sales for the year 2003. The chart reveals that travel sector dominated the sales online, raking up 36% of the total revenue. The second highest percent of revenue was generated by the internet sales was in the apparel section. It garnered 24%. Movies and songs collected a little more than one-fifths of the total earnings. The lowest contributor in 2003 to the online sales for retail was books whose collection stood at a meager 19% of the total. This is in stark contrast to 2013. The second chart illustrates that ten years later, cinema and songs are the largest supplier of money from online sales. It garnered 33% of the total sales. As compared to the earlier 2003 sales, in 10 years sales of travel sector has dropped by 7% and it is in 2nd place. In 2003, books recorded the lowest percent of total money collected. The chart reveals that sales of books grew by 3% from its previous figure. The clothing section took a dramatic drop in sales in 2013 registering only 16% of the total which is lower than its earlier figures.
So, the charts show that the shopping trends have changed in 10 years. Earlier it was travel-dominant now film is the biggest revenue puller. Books take precedence over clothes in 2013, a complete reversal of the earlier trend.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...eager 19% of the total. This is in stark contrast to 2013. The second chart illus...
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..., in 10 years sales of travel sector has dropped by 7% and it is in 2nd place. In...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 5.60731707317 196% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 33.7804878049 107% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1267.0 965.302439024 131% => OK
No of words: 268.0 196.424390244 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7276119403 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 3.73543355544 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33793893291 2.65546596893 88% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 106.607317073 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507462686567 0.547539520022 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 365.4 283.868780488 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 11.0 4.33902439024 254% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 8.94146341463 201% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 14.0 22.4926829268 62% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.7704670451 43.030603864 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.3888888889 112.824112599 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8888888889 22.9334400587 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.44444444444 5.23603664747 28% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 14.0 1.69756097561 825% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 3.70975609756 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 15.0 4.09268292683 367% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241908435676 0.215688989381 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0819349394385 0.103423049105 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0900925547103 0.0843802449381 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192984073443 0.15604864568 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.123789655397 0.0819641961636 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 13.2329268293 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 61.2550243902 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.3012195122 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.56 11.4140731707 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.06136585366 100% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 40.7170731707 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.4329268293 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.9970731707 69% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 180, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... The retail sectors for online sales are travel, film and music, books and clothe...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...el, film and music, books and clothes. The first chart represents the total online...
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Line 2, column 44, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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... first chart represents the total online sales for the year 2003. The chart reve...
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...t represents the total online sales for the year 2003. The chart reveals that tr...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...total online sales for the year 2003. The chart reveals that travel sector domina...
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Line 2, column 172, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
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...ne, raking up 36% of the total revenue. The second highest percent of revenue was ...
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Line 2, column 182, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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... up 36% of the total revenue. The second highest percent of revenue was generated...
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Line 2, column 355, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...ted a little more than one-fifths of the total earnings. The lowest contributor i...
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...r in 2003 to the online sales for retail was books whose collection stood at a me...
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Line 2, column 515, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...eager 19% of the total. This is in stark contrast to 2013. The second chart illus...
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Line 2, column 618, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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... later, cinema and songs are the largest supplier of money from online sales. It ...
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Line 2, column 770, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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..., in 10 years sales of travel sector has dropped by 7% and it is in 2nd place. In...
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Line 2, column 852, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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... 2003, books recorded the lowest percent of total money collected. The chart reve...
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Line 2, column 1079, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...he total which is lower than its earlier figures. So, the charts show that the s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 5.60731707317 196% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 33.7804878049 107% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1267.0 965.302439024 131% => OK
No of words: 268.0 196.424390244 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7276119403 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 3.73543355544 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33793893291 2.65546596893 88% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 106.607317073 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507462686567 0.547539520022 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 365.4 283.868780488 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 11.0 4.33902439024 254% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 8.94146341463 201% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 14.0 22.4926829268 62% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.7704670451 43.030603864 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.3888888889 112.824112599 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8888888889 22.9334400587 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.44444444444 5.23603664747 28% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 14.0 1.69756097561 825% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 3.70975609756 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 15.0 4.09268292683 367% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241908435676 0.215688989381 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0819349394385 0.103423049105 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0900925547103 0.0843802449381 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192984073443 0.15604864568 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.123789655397 0.0819641961636 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 13.2329268293 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 61.2550243902 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.3012195122 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.56 11.4140731707 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.06136585366 100% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 40.7170731707 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.4329268293 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.9970731707 69% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.