The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts give information about the online sales for four retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.
Overall, the data indicated that the proportion of clothes and travel sectors decreased over the period. Meanwhile, there was a growth of online sales for the two remaining sectors, which were the books and film/music sectors.
Turning to the first chart, the travel sector came as the most popular online sale, practiced by 36% in 2003. Clothes and film/music were followed, which accounted for 24% and 21% respectively. The books sector was the least popular, which represented 19%.
Taking a look closer at the second chart, in the year 2013, the proportion of the film/music sector, which rose to 33% of total online sales, became the most popular sector. Travel came second, accounting for 29%, followed by the books sector at 22%. The clothes decreased dramatically to 16%, which was the lowest percentage of online sales at that time.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 198, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'books'' or 'book's'?
Suggestion: books'; book's
...unted for 24% and 21% respectively. The books sector was the least popular, which rep...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 230, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'books'' or 'book's'?
Suggestion: books'; book's
...nd, accounting for 29%, followed by the books sector at 22%. The clothes decreased dr...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, look, second, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 33.7804878049 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 799.0 965.302439024 83% => OK
No of words: 159.0 196.424390244 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0251572327 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.55098862472 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49020072284 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 89.0 106.607317073 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.559748427673 0.547539520022 102% => OK
syllable_count: 229.5 283.868780488 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.0139885082 43.030603864 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.7777777778 112.824112599 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6666666667 22.9334400587 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.88888888889 5.23603664747 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249201138095 0.215688989381 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119684324557 0.103423049105 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.132169257725 0.0843802449381 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207096389726 0.15604864568 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.155509636932 0.0819641961636 190% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.2329268293 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 61.2550243902 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.3012195122 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 11.4140731707 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.06136585366 107% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 40.7170731707 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 198, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'books'' or 'book's'?
Suggestion: books'; book's
...unted for 24% and 21% respectively. The books sector was the least popular, which rep...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 230, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'books'' or 'book's'?
Suggestion: books'; book's
...nd, accounting for 29%, followed by the books sector at 22%. The clothes decreased dr...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, look, second, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 33.7804878049 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 799.0 965.302439024 83% => OK
No of words: 159.0 196.424390244 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0251572327 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.55098862472 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49020072284 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 89.0 106.607317073 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.559748427673 0.547539520022 102% => OK
syllable_count: 229.5 283.868780488 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.0139885082 43.030603864 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.7777777778 112.824112599 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6666666667 22.9334400587 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.88888888889 5.23603664747 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249201138095 0.215688989381 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119684324557 0.103423049105 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.132169257725 0.0843802449381 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207096389726 0.15604864568 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.155509636932 0.0819641961636 190% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.2329268293 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 61.2550243902 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.3012195122 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 11.4140731707 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.06136585366 107% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 40.7170731707 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.