Many adults nowadays prefer spending their free time playing computer games.
Why do they do this?
Is this a positive or negative development?
It is true that an increasing number of grown people tend to play computer games during their free time. From my perspective, I believe that this is the development of the digital revolution, and it will create some negative impacts on individual’s lives regarding their health and their social relationships.
Having advanced technology can be seen as the primary reason derived from this tendency. In the past, people must use computers to enjoy video games, but now computers can be replaced by modern devices regarding smartphones, laptops, and tablets. To elaborate, by using these convenient devices, adults are able to play the same essential games everywhere they want and this means they are likely to become addicted over time. For example, white-collar workers are capable of playing games on their phones while on the commute to work, on a breaking time, or even during working time.
There are some negative influences including human health and social relationship. To begin with individuals' health, by keeping the sedentary habit, adults tend to spend all their leisure time playing games without cherishing the opportunity to enjoy the natural atmosphere or do physical activities. This can result in health conditions, so young adults faced many illnesses namely obesity, myopia, or even cancer. In terms of surrounding relationships, before computer games became a pervasive habit, individuals were more likely to gather with their family or have communication with their friends. However, in contemporary life, adults are immersed in playing video games which can weaken the bonds of a close-knit family and mutual understanding in friendship.
In conclusion, due to the development of the electronic industry, adults have become addicted to computer games and this is harmful as it fosters passivity. Therefore, I suppose that it will be positive if they can set limits for themselves
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- Many adults nowadays prefer spending their free time playing computer games Why do they do this Is this a positive or negative development 78
- Some believe children should be taught to give speeches and presentations in school Why is this Should this be taught in schools 73
- Some believe children should be taught to give speeches and presentations in school Why is this Should this be taught in schools 78
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 515, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... playing games on their phones while on the commute to work, on a breaking time, or even du...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, regarding, so, therefore, while, for example, i suppose, in conclusion, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1612.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 300.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37333333333 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91315788945 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 515.7 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.8031856433 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.0 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0769230769 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.84615384615 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.395242813408 0.244688304435 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120869497676 0.084324248473 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0601229634518 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.228009852418 0.151304729494 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0215120210877 0.056905535591 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.36 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.