"Most cultures encourage individuals to sacrifice a large part of their own personalities in order to be like other people. Thus, most people are afraid to think or behave differently because they do not want to be excluded."
Over the years, the way of life governing a particular group of people have been passed down from generations to generations with the hope of keeping and strengthening the cultural beliefs. This prompt states that this way of life has allowed the people of a society abandon most of their interests and hence, are afraid to behave distinctly. I mostly agree with this statement for two reasons. However, I do concede that most cultures are flexible enough to allow personal choices to be made by its members.
First of all, to achieve mind-blowing creativities requires freedom in all aspects of life; freedom to think critically and extensively out of the box. This has been made difficult by most rigid cultures that insist on antiquated modes of behavior, thinking and operations. For instance, a fashion specialist who hails from Benin City, a well respected town in Nigeria, would be severely criticized and censured if he takes a move to add some contemporary styles and design to the crown (made of 95% beads) of the Oba of Benin; the culture believes that the beaded crown is what has been helping previous kings to rule the kingdom. Therefore, this specialist wouldn't want the society to imagine him as being awkwardly different and would consequently be scared of being labelled as a black sheep.
Additionally, most cultures ascribe different behaviors or responsibilities to males and females preventing one gender from doing what has been attributed to the other gender. For example, in the African culture, only males are encouraged to indulge in activities like farming, hunting, sports, even leadership roles because a male is believed to be the breadwinner of the family and also stronger that the females. Thus, any attempt of the female gender to get involved in those activities is seen as an anomaly - even if the female has the ability, passion or skill necessary to carry out the tasks.
On a contrary, most cultures give opportunities to choose based on interest. This is the case of religion in the western part of Nigeria. The people have three choices: Christianity, Islamic and Traditional beliefs. The availability of these choices do not allow individuals abandon their personalities or interests to be like others, neither does it instill in them the fear of being excluded from the society.
In conclusion, most cultures have successfully limited its citizens to becoming a generally accepted kind of personalities, thus, creating in them, the fear of been exceptional.
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- Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers 58
- A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take In developing and supporting you 50
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 658, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...the kingdom. Therefore, this specialist wouldnt want the society to imagine him as bein...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, so, still, then, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.4196629213 16% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 58.6224719101 113% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2105.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 410.0 442.535393258 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13414634146 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91977493841 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 215.323595506 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573170731707 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 669.6 704.065955056 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.6495078056 60.3974514979 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.5625 118.986275619 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.625 23.4991977007 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.6875 5.21951772744 186% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.34028099458 0.243740707755 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0972733582685 0.0831039109588 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0593995172316 0.0758088955206 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167814111742 0.150359130593 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0625140286963 0.0667264976115 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.61 8.38706741573 115% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 100.480337079 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 658, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...the kingdom. Therefore, this specialist wouldnt want the society to imagine him as bein...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, so, still, then, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.4196629213 16% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 58.6224719101 113% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2105.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 410.0 442.535393258 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13414634146 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91977493841 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 215.323595506 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573170731707 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 669.6 704.065955056 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.6495078056 60.3974514979 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.5625 118.986275619 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.625 23.4991977007 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.6875 5.21951772744 186% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.34028099458 0.243740707755 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0972733582685 0.0831039109588 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0593995172316 0.0758088955206 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167814111742 0.150359130593 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0625140286963 0.0667264976115 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.61 8.38706741573 115% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 100.480337079 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.