The two pie charts illustrate the figures for different factors that make people happy the most of those who are under 30 and over 30 Generally both under 30 and over 30 feel happy when they achieve good results at work or do their hobbies However with th

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The two pie charts illustrate the figures for different factors that make people happy the most of those who are under 30 and over 30. Generally, both under 30 and over 30 feel happy when they achieve good results at work or do their hobbies. However, with the left factors, people who are under 30 seem to be happy when they have a good appearance and travel while stability is what makes those over 30 cheerful.
With achievement at work, the percentage of 2 groups are the same with 32%, this is also the highest number of both. In contrast, with doing hobbies, the figure for those over 30 is 24%, higher than under 30 2%.
People under 30 also feel happy when they make a good appearance and travel, however, the percentage of travelling is 15%, lower than having a good appearance 3%. Turning to people over 30, they are joyful when being with family, accounting for 14% while the number of financial security is 20%, 4% higher.

The two pie charts illustrate the figures for different factors that make people happy the most of those who are under 30 and over 30. Generally, both under 30 and over 30 feel happy when they achieve good results at work or do their hobbies. However, with the left factors, people who are under 30 seem to be happy when they have a good appearance and travel while stability is what makes those over 30 cheerful.
With achievement at work, the percentage of 2 groups are the same with 32%, this is also the highest number of both. In contrast, with doing hobbies, the figure for those over 30 is 24%, higher than under 30 2%.
People under 30 also feel happy when they make a good appearance and travel, however, the percentage of travelling is 15%, lower than having a good appearance 3%. Turning to people over 30, they are joyful when being with family, accounting for 14% while the number of financial security is 20%, 4% higher.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 173, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'feel' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'feels'.
Suggestion: feels
...0. Generally, both under 30 and over 30 feel happy when they achieve good results at...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, while, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 25.0 33.7804878049 74% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 772.0 965.302439024 80% => OK
No of words: 169.0 196.424390244 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.56804733728 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60555127546 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.27694583512 2.65546596893 86% => OK
Unique words: 93.0 106.607317073 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.550295857988 0.547539520022 101% => OK
syllable_count: 226.8 283.868780488 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.1682156481 43.030603864 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.285714286 112.824112599 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1428571429 22.9334400587 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.85714285714 5.23603664747 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.715700053519 0.215688989381 332% => The coherence between essay topic and essay body is overfitting.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.388285756652 0.103423049105 375% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.199188280851 0.0843802449381 236% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.502778893245 0.15604864568 322% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.218611144239 0.0819641961636 267% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.2329268293 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.5 61.2550243902 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 11.4140731707 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.06136585366 96% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 40.7170731707 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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