You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Some people feel that entertainers such as film stars, pop musicians or sports stars are paid too much money.
Do you agree or disagree?
Which other types of job should be highly paid?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
You should write at least 254 words.
In the contemporary life,show business is became more popular for amusing community.With this situation some kind of occupation opportunities are emerged.Such as film stars or sports stars,pop musicians.And nowdays this kind of people earn money more than most of the people in comunity.
Initially,entertainment sector is should be help to people who want to spent time with watching film or listening music.For most of the people after works or schools give to attention something different and amusing can boost their life quality.Such as they can image the new worlds or resting with relaxing musics.For examples,watch sports branch competition and support the one team could be exciting and can help to chilling in leisure time.And the people who are working in movie,singing song or doing sports are also realy hard working to successful to their jobs.Thus,they eventually deserve earn money as a adequate.But nowdays,this various of people gain much more money than the they deserve.For example,film starts are be able to earn amount of high money just playing in one movie.This should be following under the regulation by governments.
Secondly,amusing to the society can be popular occupations for some part of people but is not vital continue to lifeSustanaible for human life there is a most important occupations.For examples,doctors,engineers,teachers or nurses could be in this list.This people should annually income more than the player or singer.
Eventually,I agree to starts or singers should be gain less money according to their profesionally.And also,people who are working for society should take what they deserve as a anually.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1409.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 254.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.54724409449 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.87170446705 2.80592935109 138% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 176.041082164 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.555118110236 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 424.8 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 16.0721442886 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 63.0 20.2975951904 310% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 259.725215372 49.4020404114 526% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 352.25 106.682146367 330% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 63.5 20.7667163134 306% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 18.0 7.06120827912 255% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 38.0 5.01903807615 757% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243123453635 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.155999421238 0.084324248473 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0165792998889 0.0667982634062 25% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155999421238 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0165792998889 0.056905535591 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 36.5 13.0946893788 279% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -0.93 50.2224549098 -2% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 17.1 7.44779559118 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 29.0 11.3001002004 257% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.8 12.4159519038 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.62 8.58950901804 124% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 31.0 9.78957915832 317% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 27.2 10.1190380762 269% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 31.0 10.7795591182 288% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.