Write a narrative essay about someone or something that influenced you.
I have a big passion for music. I always put my headphone on whenever I have freetime. Going back in the time I was in highschool, there was a song that pull me over the hardships. It's called "SEA", performed by one of the most famous asia boyband- BTS.
It was coincident when I found this song because I'm not their fan. I remembered It was a terrible day for I received my bad score at class, I returned home after strolled around Ninh Kieu quay feeling nothing better. I went online and found it all of sudden. "Where there is hope, there is always hardship". I'm touched when the very first line popped up.
The song demonstrates that we cannot escape from bad experiences for it's a priority of growing process. Thus, what we can do is keeping on hoping and facing the failure. "Standing here the coast, but all I see is a blue desert". I thought a lot about it. When I felt down, everything surrounding looks worse. It was just a bad score among many high score ones. I cannot stop being dissappointed about myself though I did try my best. The song did help me go over overthinking and gave me strong nerves to accept the fact that I'm not able to be good at everything. Moreover, It also shows that we can be happy if we are sastified with what we had. Most of the trials would become beautiful moments in life if we witness it from different angles. "even I'm nervous, even I'm in desert, It's the beautiful Namib desert."
It have been years since I graduated from highschool, I overcame most of my issues and I still love the song. Whenever I feel frustrated, I give it a listen. It successfully reminds me of beautiful Namib, the only desert in the world stands beside the sea. Then I would tell myself to run a little faster, the sea is right overthere.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, moreover, so, still, then, thus, i feel
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 7.0 214% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 1.00243902439 599% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 55.0 5.60731707317 981% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 33.7804878049 101% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1481.0 965.302439024 153% => OK
No of words: 329.0 196.424390244 167% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.50151975684 4.92477711251 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 3.73543355544 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80243490759 2.65546596893 106% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 106.607317073 186% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601823708207 0.547539520022 110% => OK
syllable_count: 456.3 283.868780488 161% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 1.53170731707 1045% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 8.94146341463 257% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 14.0 22.4926829268 62% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.1215844173 43.030603864 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 64.3913043478 112.824112599 57% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 14.3043478261 22.9334400587 62% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.91304347826 5.23603664747 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 1.69756097561 530% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 3.70975609756 243% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 1.13902439024 527% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0159619522789 0.215688989381 7% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00676896397387 0.103423049105 7% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0227783078082 0.0843802449381 27% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.00643663072114 0.15604864568 4% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0111485714386 0.0819641961636 14% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.9 13.2329268293 52% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 61.2550243902 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.3012195122 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.23 11.4140731707 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.26 8.06136585366 90% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 40.7170731707 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.4329268293 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.9970731707 69% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.0658536585 63% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.