TOEFL Writing practice test 9
First of all, the passage states that the original idea of the character of James Bond
comes from the mixture of various experiences from genuine spies working for British,
which are collected by Ian Fleming thanks to his expanding spy networks.However,the
lecture argues that this character's prototype is from a book depicting a spy called Popo,
a double spy agent of British.
Meanwhile, the passage mentions that it is impossible for any spies to have playful attitude and romantic relationship with women during their intelligence operations. The lecture, on the other hand, illustrates that Popo literally take avantage of his playboy characteristic to influtrate information.
Likewise, while the passage states that treating dangerous situation with a smile is too risky for any spies to do so, the lecture argues that this is possible, given that Popo does that frequently when he plays high stake poker game.Were he not astute enough, he surely would have lost his life.
Last but not least, according to the passage, Ian Fleming's narratives are completely fictional without any real conection with a singal real event. The lecture refutes, on the contrary,even if Popo does not use fire gun or any sophisicated gagets like James Bond does, he is the protoytpe of Bond as a lot of Popo's personalexperiences can be noticed in the novel.
- The government wants to make investment to improve education Which one of the following investments do you think is the best 76
- The government wants to make investment to improve education Which one of the following investments do you think is the best 86
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is more important to make friends with people who can have fun with us than to make friends with people who can help us when we are in need 90
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is more important to make friends with people who can have fun with us than to make friends with people who can help us when we are in need 90
- The government wants to make investment to improve education Which one of the following investments do you think is the best 88
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 87, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...inal idea of the character of James Bond comes from the mixture of various experi...
^^^
Line 3, column 73, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: However
...ng thanks to his expanding spy networks.However,the lecture argues that this character...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 80, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...ks to his expanding spy networks.However,the lecture argues that this characters pr...
^^^^
Line 4, column 90, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...from a book depicting a spy called Popo, a double spy agent of British. Meanw...
^^^
Line 9, column 235, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Were
...tly when he plays high stake poker game.Were he not astute enough, he surely would h...
^^^^
Line 11, column 185, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , even
...nt. The lecture refutes, on the contrary,even if Popo does not use fire gun or any so...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, likewise, so, while, first of all, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 22.412803532 85% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 30.3222958057 86% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1143.0 1373.03311258 83% => OK
No of words: 219.0 270.72406181 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21917808219 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.84690116678 4.04702891845 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06580796842 2.5805825403 119% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 145.348785872 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.643835616438 0.540411800872 119% => OK
syllable_count: 364.5 419.366225166 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 13.0662251656 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 36.0 21.2450331126 169% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 89.2779679179 49.2860985944 181% => OK
Chars per sentence: 190.5 110.228320801 173% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.5 21.698381199 168% => OK
Discourse Markers: 15.6666666667 7.06452816374 222% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.09492273731 195% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.4 13.3589403974 160% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 26.48 53.8541721854 49% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 5.55761589404 202% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.5 11.0289183223 168% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.59 12.2367328918 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.47 8.42419426049 124% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 63.6247240618 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 10.7273730684 186% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.4 10.498013245 156% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 11.2008830022 179% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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