Some people think that punishment is essential in a child’s education, while others think rewards would be better. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
It is commonly believed by many that punishing children is important to ensure their proper upbringing, whereas some feel that rewarding is more effective. There are stong arguments on both sides, which will be discussed now. In my opinion, there should be usage of both approaches, giving first priority to rewarding and then punishing.
On the one hand, the supports of giving punishment to children point out that the efficacy of ensuring that they are not repeating the same mistake. Historically, corporal punishments have been proven to be effective in forming proper demeanor among children who are usually mischiveous. For instance, this is a common practice in India, where parents beat their child in order to reform them. It works to control outward behavior of Indian children. They further argue that when children are slapped or canned, it instill a fear among them and deter them to being insolent and insubordinate. Thus, this approach appear to compel children to change their attitude.
On the other hand, the opponents of physical punishment cite that children should be encouraged and motivate by offering rewards. Rewarding does not only means giving gifts, but also include verbal praises. This is correct and humanitarian way to ensure children are raised up with proper care and love, which definitely make them listen to their parents and elders. Moreover, seriously punishing children may stifle their growth because it can cause psychological issues and mental trauma, which can have last effect even when they grow up. Therefore, corporal punishments is banned in most countries, particularly in western nations. It seems that this approach is rather self-motivating than compulsive as children will whole-heartedly want to achieve success and proper conduct of behavior.
To conclude, there are valid arguments on both viewpoints. In my opinion, parents should incorporate both methods. This can be done by first encouraging children to change by rewarding. If they show no improvement or revolt, parents can resort to punishing them provided that punishment are not severe; thus, there is no significant harm done to their mental or physical health.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, so, still, then, therefore, thus, whereas, for instance, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1845.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 344.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36337209302 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8118730898 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56976744186 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 558.9 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.3921115672 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.1052631579 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1052631579 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.63157894737 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152288988196 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0534347196586 0.084324248473 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0454922474811 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113477975501 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0623312295858 0.056905535591 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.51 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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