Advertising discourages people from being different individuals by making us want to be or to look the same. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Advertising is deemed to play a crucial role in modern society and some believe that they prevent individuality in humans. While I agree with the opinion, I also think that some people are not influenced by adverts.
On the one hand, advertisements affect individuals by showing many continuous unchanged images and patterns for a long period of time. For years, companies have been using celebrities, eye-catching visual effects or emotional stories to draw people's attention and slowly set new standards and norms for the society, only to send a message of buying their products. For instance, toner, a make-up product, wasn't a necessity in 2000s' girls' make-up routines, but after 20 years of advertising, now, toner has become one of the best-selling make-up products. By setting new standards, advertisements are putting pressure on people who differ from others. As a result, more and more people, especially younger ones, are losing their own identities and personal styles.
On the other hand, there are still some people that don't blindly follow trends and they can recognise things that are suitable for their appearance. Not all humans have the perfect body for trendy dresses or the same love for famous bags. For instance, Harajuku, Japan is a famous fashion street where everybody has their own senses of style and unique features that have never appeared on any advertisements. Also, nowadays, people are becoming more and more conscious of their budget so advertisements of trending but expensive items like Gucci bags or a Lamborghini may not strongly affect their purchases.
To conclude, although there are similarities in people's buying habits due to advertisements, most of them still have personal preferences and unique styles.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, still, while, for instance, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1486.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 279.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32616487455 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90138443309 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.637992831541 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 460.8 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.705082428 49.4020404114 159% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.6 106.682146367 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.9 20.7667163134 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.2 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.11888454251 0.244688304435 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0502001259967 0.084324248473 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0449536380203 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0690540466911 0.151304729494 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0330817968882 0.056905535591 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.01 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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