TPO 60 Independent
One of the main dimentions of human life is to decide where to live and how long to stay there. Some people prefer to move from a location or city after a while, whereas other choose to immigrate to other places every period of life. When it comes to me, I prefer to stay at the same place my whole life for a various reasons, two of which I'm going to elaborate to support my stand view in the following essay.
To begin with, immigrating to a new city is a time taking, complicated process. Before moving, if the person's destination be a big city, he should spend while there considering which district is more corporate with his intentions,apart from finding the appropriate apartment in the continue. all of this decisions need a long time which means the person may have to stay away from his work, previous home, family and etc for such a long time. For instance, once we decided to immigrate from Isfahan, one of the big cities of Iran, to Tehran, the capital of Iran, we spent about three month fluctuating between two cities not only because Tehran was a very large city with about fifteen main district, but also, as the lease of appartmanets was really expensive. Finding the one which was matching with our situation was really time-taking. My dad got warning from his boss about his absence by this time. Accordingly, It seem that requiring long time for this moving can be actually a negative point to handle.
What is more, I would say that all of this project is unpredictably expensive, from the fundamental bases to last levels. Leaving the city to another town means you have to pack all the furnitures, rent a big car for convy them, employ some persons to help you transferring them in both first and last location and also, if the city you are moving to be more complex than your first, the rent of the homes is really catastrophic. this decision takes you to a choatic situation to handle. For example, for our Immigration to Tehran, my dad spent all of our saved money just to pay the initial costs. We could completely feel how every thing was overwhelming first days after transfer and as his daughter, I felt sorry to ask further money for my daily even when I had to handle with higher prices in the bigger city. Based on this notes, this process doesn't seem easy as the costs steps in.
All in all, if all the factors contemplated, we can easily conclusion that moving to another town or city is neither easy nor cheap for everyone. When we can live better in our previous home, why take our self in the complicated situation of immigrating?
| Post date | Users | Rates | Link to Content |
|---|---|---|---|
| 2021-12-26 | Fateme_mhd | 3 | view |
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 319, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'reason'?
Suggestion: reason
... same place my whole life for a various reasons, two of which Im going to elaborate to ...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 341, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...ife for a various reasons, two of which Im going to elaborate to support my stand ...
^^
Line 2, column 102, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...plicated process. Before moving, if the persons destination be a big city, he should sp...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 229, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , apart
...ct is more corporate with his intentions,apart from finding the appropriate apartment ...
^^^^^^
Line 2, column 278, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...om finding the appropriate apartment in the continue. all of this decisions need a long time...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 292, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: All
... appropriate apartment in the continue. all of this decisions need a long time whic...
^^^
Line 2, column 299, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...riate apartment in the continue. all of this decisions need a long time which means ...
^^^^
Line 2, column 584, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'month' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'months'.
Suggestion: months
...e capital of Iran, we spent about three month fluctuating between two cities not only...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 691, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'district' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'districts'.
Suggestion: districts
...very large city with about fifteen main district, but also, as the lease of appartmanets...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 921, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'seems'?
Suggestion: seems
...s absence by this time. Accordingly, It seem that requiring long time for this movin...
^^^^
Line 3, column 261, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to transfer' or 'transfer'.
Suggestion: to transfer; transfer
...y them, employ some persons to help you transferring them in both first and last location an...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 430, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...nt of the homes is really catastrophic. this decision takes you to a choatic situati...
^^^^
Line 3, column 825, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...her prices in the bigger city. Based on this notes, this process doesnt seem easy as...
^^^^
Line 3, column 850, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...city. Based on this notes, this process doesnt seem easy as the costs steps in. All i...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, actually, also, but, first, if, may, really, so, whereas, while, apart from, for example, for instance, to begin with, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2109.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 464.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54525862069 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53913977347 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532327586207 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 669.6 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.3334357587 48.9658058833 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.166666667 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7777777778 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.41 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.