It is commonly believed that nowadays main factors that affect a child's development are Media, Pop Culture and friends .a diffrent point of view is that family plays the most significant role .discuss both views and give your opinion
nowadays ,one of the most controversial subject that many people are discussing is the factors couse in improving the children .one group believe that media and friends play an important role in children's success, others debate that family are more effective on children's development.in this essay I discuse these two groups and write why I am agree with second group
media and peers have many positive effects on children's development .it is clear that children spend a great deal of time with their friends ,they talked about diffrent issues and play many games with each other, so, the result is asociable , strong-willed and an outgoing child.these relationships can improve their confidence .in addition, when children play computer game,it can helps them to melt away their tention and extra energy and lead them to be calm. For instance,a cartoon character usually has strong impact on children.like Harry Potter who is a boy that have had a difficult life ,but he could find the straight way and become successful last
On the other hand a child born and grew with his/her family ,due to ,they learn everything from their parents primarily.their reactions are depended his/her father and especially his/her mother's behaviour ,so it is natural their behavior and personalities are relatively like their parents.because parents have directly impact on their children 's characters,if they encourage them ,they will become successful .additionally,adults are always care about their children,so they try to choose a best way tat its result ia a successful .they usually motivate their children to persue their wishes and objectives to become a useful person in society.in other to these,we cannot egnnore their role in developing children.
In my opinion,since the roles of parents are more clear ,I agree with second group.parents are in the first step for making their personality,if they bright up a good and strong character, children become successful, should they do not pay attention to their children their children will be a short_wield.however,media and friends are important ,without a right nurture they are not effective.
: In conclusion, much as the media and peers are very significant in children's development ,not only are parents their pillar of strength and support,but also they are their source of inspiration and guidance ,for these reasons we cannot neglect their role from the first to the end of children's life
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also, but, first, however, if, second, so, for instance, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
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Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 24.0651302605 241% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
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No of words: 388.0 315.596192385 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30927835052 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10969301765 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 176.041082164 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572164948454 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 616.5 506.74238477 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
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Sentence length: 97.0 20.2975951904 478% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
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Words per sentence: 97.0 20.7667163134 467% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 20.75 7.06120827912 294% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 45.0 5.01903807615 897% => Less language errors wanted.
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Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0950288160655 0.244688304435 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0684047475257 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0427328401754 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0693189918069 0.151304729494 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.039973464747 0.056905535591 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 52.1 13.0946893788 398% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -26.98 50.2224549098 -54% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 15.9 7.44779559118 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 41.1 11.3001002004 364% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.7 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 12.07 8.58950901804 141% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 55.0 9.78957915832 562% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 40.8 10.1190380762 403% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 41.0 10.7795591182 380% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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