The value of a civilization is reflected in its artistic creations rather than in its scientific accomplishments
s the value of civilization reflected in its artistic creations rather than in its scientific accomplishments? The speaker thinks so. Although artistic creations are important in depicting how civilization has progressed. In some countries and even some community they pass down their history right from the dark ages to this present time of civilization. For example, in Egypt, artistic creations are used in depicting t how civilization has progressed over the years. From the story of the first Pharaohs how things were done and how things slowly progressed as civilization emerges. These artistic creations are then used to pass down the story of civilization for generations to come. Although artistic creation can be used occasionally to reflect the value of civilization, it does not mean it reflects it rather than the scientific accomplishments.
Scientific accomplishments have in no doubt caused an inexorable contribution to the evolvement of humans. In fact, the value of the civilization would not be properly reflected without scientific accomplishments. For example the development of computer which has been of a tremendous help to human clearly depicts the value of civilization because work that would have proven difficult to be accomplished by humans ordinarily can now be done easily with the help of computers.
Another perfect example is the discovery of electricity by Michael Faraday. Who among the present generation does not benefit from the availability of electricity? We can almost not accomplish anything without the presence of electricity. We watch television; recharge our phones, laptops, and headset and read our books due to the availability of electricity. Another perfect example is the invention of airplanes by the Right brothers which enables us to travel round the word which previously would not have been possible.
Another perfect example is the development of medical equipment which has helped us to improve our live expectancy and live in good health. Examples include the Blood pressure monitoring device, the blood sugar monitoring device, the CT scan etc. The development of vaccine has also reduced mortality rate in our community. What better depicts the value of civilization than all these? So the value of civilization is not necessarily reflected by its artistic creations rather than its scientific creations.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, then, even so, for example, in fact, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 14.8657303371 34% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2006.0 2235.4752809 90% => OK
No of words: 367.0 442.535393258 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.4659400545 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.2113632707 2.79657885939 115% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.50136239782 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 633.6 704.065955056 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.7553093981 60.3974514979 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.5238095238 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4761904762 23.4991977007 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.38095238095 5.21951772744 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.468725061562 0.243740707755 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.152541862829 0.0831039109588 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.255630243126 0.0758088955206 337% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.25423915556 0.150359130593 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.176037856653 0.0667264976115 264% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.15 12.1639044944 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 100.480337079 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.