In some countries, if people need to find work, they have to move away from their families and their friends. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
In several regions in the world, numerous people have to travel far away from their family to acquire a job. In my opinion on this matter, the disadvantages are more visible than the advantages for two reasons. In this essay, I will discuss the cause of why people work far from home as well as the reason why I think that this fact may do more harm than good.
First of all, people need to move away from their family to work because not that all areas share the same amount of job opportunity as well as the salary level. Usually there are less job variation to choose in the countryside than in the city; therefore, countless people have moved to the city to pursuit their career. For instance, Hanoi, being the capital city of Vietnam, had witnessed a rise of 1.6 million people in its population in 10 years, from 2009 to 2019, as a result of people moving in to seek study and job chances. Moreover, the salary level in more developed countries is usually higher than that of developing countries, and the number has attracted a lot of workers to obtain a job overseas. One typical example is that there are about 10000 Vietnamese workers doing various job in Japan because of the high wages this country can offer.
Personally speaking, this matter triggers demerits rather than merits. Firstly, this moving trend may pose a great burden on local authorities and also for residents of big cities. More people means more facilities such as work places, schools, hospitals, road system need to be built and maintained, not to mention that the enormous traffic loads and jams will probably result in air pollution.
Secondly, people living far from home cannot avoid feeling lonely and less attached to their family. Expatriates have no one to take care of them in case of illness as well as they cannot do the same even if their family member faces fatal ailments. Their kids may grow up without a parent, which is scientifically proven to be not good for children development.
In conclusion, there are obviously reasons why people leave their family to pursuit a job. However, this results in more drawbacks than benefits.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 212, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...le than the advantages for two reasons. In this essay, I will discuss the cause of...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for instance, i think, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1764.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 372.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74193548387 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45266790166 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559139784946 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 548.1 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.1661861906 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.25 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.25 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.75 7.06120827912 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312525635026 0.244688304435 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0987499756279 0.084324248473 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0757085782515 0.0667982634062 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166247826148 0.151304729494 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0668032520075 0.056905535591 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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