Some people think that children nowadays have too much freedom. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Issue concerning children’s span of freedom has been heatedly discussed, from which opinions stated that children are gradually possess with too much freedom aroused. However, under such an extremely competitive world with both pressures came from social and family, it’s not easy for children to truly enjoy the freedom.
Speaking of the external environment, social competition aggravated year by year. Economically, the number of talents and skilled experts in all industries has rapidly increased to a new level. Children have to face much more peer pressure than their predecessors in the future, which means they have to foster themselves to become a more competitive person in order to accommodate the future needs of recruitment. Under such circumstances, to stand out of this fierce competition, children are prone to learn what peers are learning now so as to transcend their peers, and continue to juggle for the winner. This kind of behavior damaged the freedom that children could have the rights to do what they are purely interested in like play interesting games or go travelling, but not for self-interest or competitiveness.
Considered the internal environment, family is another predominant factor that limit children’s freedom. Some families are faced with a serious generation gap between parents and their children, which leads to a deep misunderstanding that discourages children from owning their freedom. For instance, parents are sometimes stubborn at children’s career goals and future plans. To make their career path seemingly ideal and optimal, parents forbid their children to develop their hobbies which are not related to their aims even though children have talents and passion for them. While parents think their hobbies are trivial and useless, children regard them as a wonderful way to reduce their stress and find the true fulfillment and happiness. However, these coercive discouragements from parents largely deprive children’s freedom of choosing what they sincerely want.
In conclusion, it’s an arduous process for children faced with external and internal pressure and prevention to acquire their freedom.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 129, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'possessed'.
Suggestion: possessed
...ions stated that children are gradually possess with too much freedom aroused. However,...
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Line 3, column 539, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...ne to learn what peers are learning now so as to transcend their peers, and continue to ...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, so, while, as to, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, speaking of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1843.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 330.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.58484848485 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93862689148 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584848484848 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 545.4 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.7470115597 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.642857143 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5714285714 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.78571428571 7.06120827912 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221379581321 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0794214326862 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.049986608544 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133425622595 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0360016762472 0.056905535591 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.0946893788 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.38 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.28 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.