"Students should memorize facts only after they have studied the ideas, trends, and concepts
that help explain those facts. Students who have learned only facts have learned very little."
The author claims that students who study ideas, trends and concept related to facts have better memorization of those facts than those who study only facts. I mostly agree with the idea.
Firstly, Facts are better learned if studied with background concepts, ideas and trends that explains the facts thoroughly. This help students memorize facts as they learn those facts practically. The more a student studies cases, concepts, trends related to the facts, the more facts get clear him. Studying concepts, ideas, trends intertwined with the fact help a student get to know more about a fact than the student who merely learn the facts. Our brain has a tendency to memorize things we study in details in the long term and more clearly. For example, a student studying economic models such as Philips curve would memorize the facts of that model more clearly if he studies the history, application, concepts of that model than the student who only learn the definition of that model. A student who is determined to study facts only knows and learns a little and forgets the facts easily.
But, facts related to theoretical subjects like English literature, History, Religion requires no prior concept, idea study to memorize. Theoretical facts can be learned through repetitive study. Studying concepts, ideas and trends in case of theoretical subjects can be undoubtedly of slight help but time consuming in some cases. On the other hand, science subjects can little be learned if studied facts only. For example, a student who is studying botany will only memorize the fact that that trees have life only if through a practical examination. In that case, studying ideas, concepts and trends along with practical examination and application would help the student memorize the fact for a life time.
In final analysis, despite the fact that some subjects require practical examination and application of facts to memorize better, in the first place concepts, ideas and trends are better way to get acquainted with the facts first and even memorize better for every subjects.
- Although many people think that the luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life are entirely harmless they in fact prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals 50
- Most cultures encourage individuals to sacrifice a large part of their own personalities in order to be like other people Thus most people are afraid to think or behave differently because they do not want to be exclude 50
- Scientists and researchers should focus their research on areas that are likely to benefit the greatest number of people Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive because it is primarily in 50
- Most cultures encourage individuals to sacrifice a large part of their own personalities in order to be like other people Thus most people are afraid to think or behave differently because they do not want to be exclude 78
- Although many people think that the luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life are entirely harmless they in fact prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals 50
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 700, Rule ID: LIFE_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'lifetime'?
Suggestion: lifetime
...elp the student memorize the fact for a life time. In final analysis, despite the fact ...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, so, for example, such as, in some cases, in the first place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.5258426966 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 58.6224719101 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1741.0 2235.4752809 78% => OK
No of words: 340.0 442.535393258 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12058823529 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51103274911 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 215.323595506 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.432352941176 0.4932671777 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 522.9 704.065955056 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.1779870031 60.3974514979 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.8125 118.986275619 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.25 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4375 5.21951772744 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.5858590221 0.243740707755 240% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.241026757023 0.0831039109588 290% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.141449624031 0.0758088955206 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.387597699087 0.150359130593 258% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.13076258532 0.0667264976115 196% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.1392134831 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 100.480337079 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.