Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Human activity is making the earth a worse place to live. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, with the proliferation of the population of human-being, the Earth is undertaking a series of crises. From my own perspective, I wholeheartedly believe human activities are making our Earth a worse place to live in. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will illuminate in the following essay.
First of all, there was so much species extinction due to human activities. For example, I once watched a film, which talked about how Japanese people slaughtered dolphins and whales. It is said that Japanese fishermen caught those animals for commercial shows or meat. However, the movie points out that the meat from dolphins was not popular in the market since it tasted so sour to human-being. The fisherman just killed them for no reason. I felt furious and, more importantly, depressed after seeing that movie since it seemed impossible for me to save those beautiful and brilliant animals. The most terrible thing is that the slaughter of dolphins is just a little shadow of a nightmare. People have killed so many species with no mercy; some of them will never have a chance to resurge, which makes me so desperate.
Secondly, the environment of Earth has been worse than ever. Global warming, the emission of poisonous pollution and the exploitation of natural resources are so serious that humans require to solve them all, or people will be killing themselves. For instance, with the invention of private automobiles, global warming is increasingly worsening. It could cause the iceberg in polar areas to melt, which would contribute to the rise of sea level. It would endanger the citizens who live on the island places. Besides, global warming will cause tropical diseases to migrate into high-altitude areas. Since they are pretty dangerous to human-being, the migration of the illnesses will threaten humans' health. We have to clearly understand that other problems are as terrible as global warming, and they are happening simultaneously. The source of those problems mainly concerns human-being. They sacrifice the Earth's health for their own comfortable lives and economic developments like building factories and building highways for themselves. We people are so selfish.
In conclusion, I firmly believe that humans' behaviors have made the Earth worse than ever as a result of the extinction of other animals and terrible environmental conditions.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 28, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...ng essay. First of all, there was so much species extinction due to human activit...
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Line 5, column 191, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'solving'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: solving
...rces are so serious that humans require to solve them all, or people will be killing the...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, as to, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2003.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 383.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22976501305 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91879614122 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563968668407 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 619.2 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.3313201027 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.0869565217 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.652173913 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 3.85842293907 337% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15114451133 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0433003200368 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0544486604529 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114220785245 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.074385279697 0.0645574589148 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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