Some people think that government is responsible for the rise in obesity in children Do you agree or disagree Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Some people think that government is responsible for the rise in obesity in children.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Childhood obesity is a big concern in many countries, especially in developed countries. Many people blame for authorities because of ignorance and irresponsibility. I think it can be true, but parents are also responsible for this.

There is no denying that governments do not consider this issue enough. Fast food and sweet food are rife in the market, not subject to restrictions from politicians, so children can easily consume them and gain weight. This can be explained by the high profits from companies that produce food focused on children. If governments don't curb the amount of unhealthy food, the rates of obesity in children will continue to increase. Moreover, the lack of education by authorities about consuming food among children and parents is a cause of childhood obesity. They can't aware of diet and healthy food, which leads to numerous bad influences such as being overweight and having heart diseases.

I definitely agree that the main reason leading to overweight in children is from parents. Parents don't limit overeating in children, they ignore it or think that it's good for them. For example, numerous parents in Viet Nam think that the fatter, the stronger and they force their child to eat as much as possible, which leads to the rates of overweight in children in Viet Nam rising rapidly. Parents' inactive lifestyle sets a bad example for children. They rarely eat nutritional meals, play sports, or do exercise, which their children imitate and become fatter.

In conclusion, it is clear that the cause of the high percentage of obesity among children is not only the government's responsibility but also the kids' parents.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 332, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ood focused on children. If governments dont curb the amount of unhealthy food, the ...
^^^^
Line 3, column 565, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...s is a cause of childhood obesity. They cant aware of diet and healthy food, which l...
^^^^
Line 5, column 100, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ht in children is from parents. Parents dont limit overeating in children, they igno...
^^^^
Line 5, column 225, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Nam) must be used with a third-person verb: 'thinks'.
Suggestion: thinks
...r example, numerous parents in Viet Nam think that the fatter, the stronger and they ...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 108, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'governments'' or 'government's'?
Suggestion: governments'; government's
... obesity among children is not only the governments responsibility but also the kids parent...
^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1392.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 272.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11764705882 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82226534204 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558823529412 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 421.2 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.6415046244 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.8 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1333333333 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.86666666667 7.06120827912 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221221270903 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0810096054642 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0450586443795 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132634117061 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0391757034162 0.056905535591 69% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.12 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 332, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ood focused on children. If governments dont curb the amount of unhealthy food, the ...
^^^^
Line 3, column 565, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...s is a cause of childhood obesity. They cant aware of diet and healthy food, which l...
^^^^
Line 5, column 100, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ht in children is from parents. Parents dont limit overeating in children, they igno...
^^^^
Line 5, column 225, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Nam) must be used with a third-person verb: 'thinks'.
Suggestion: thinks
...r example, numerous parents in Viet Nam think that the fatter, the stronger and they ...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 108, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'governments'' or 'government's'?
Suggestion: governments'; government's
... obesity among children is not only the governments responsibility but also the kids parent...
^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1392.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 272.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11764705882 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82226534204 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558823529412 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 421.2 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.6415046244 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.8 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1333333333 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.86666666667 7.06120827912 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221221270903 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0810096054642 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0450586443795 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132634117061 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0391757034162 0.056905535591 69% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.12 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.