usage of electrical appliances and the time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019

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usage of electrical appliances and the time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Submitted by Solirous on Wed, 03/15/2023 - 11:09

The graph depicts the usage of electrical appliances and the time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Overall,it is clear that the usage percentage of electric appliances in the firgure was increasing,while the number of hours of housework per hour decreased throughout the period.

In 1920, the households with electrical appliances, which were washing machines, refrigerators,vaccum and cleaner started at 0%, 30%, and 40%, respectively. Moreover, they witnessed a significantly increasing from 1920 to 1960, and washing machine topped out at 70% and interacted with the refrigerator  line,while other appliances continued to rise. Between 1980 and 2019, refrigerator and vacuum were experienced a slight increase and stabilizing at 100%.

On the other hand,the hours of housework per week started at 50% and started to crash enormously. However, the hours per week spent on housework slipped slightly from 1960 to 2000,and reached the all time low at the end of the period, which was about 11%.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 8, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , it
...ountry between 1920 and 2019. Overall,it is clear that the usage percentage of e...
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Line 3, column 99, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , while
...appliances in the firgure was increasing,while the number of hours of housework per ho...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 95, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , vaccum
...ich were washing machines, refrigerators,vaccum and cleaner started at 0%, 30%, and 40%...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 303, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...70% and interacted with the refrigerator  line,while other appliances continued to...
^^
Line 5, column 309, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , while
...d interacted with the refrigerator  line,while other appliances continued to rise. Bet...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 18, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...tabilizing at 100%. On the other hand,the hours of housework per week started at ...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, moreover, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 4.92783505155 0% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 5.05154639175 218% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 32.9175257732 9% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 26.3917525773 114% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.85567010309 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 888.0 937.175257732 95% => OK
No of words: 161.0 206.0 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.51552795031 4.54256449028 121% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56210296601 3.78020617076 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.24891627553 2.54303337028 128% => OK
Unique words: 95.0 127.690721649 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.590062111801 0.622605031667 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 246.6 290.88556701 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.13402061856 22% => OK
Article: 4.0 0.824742268041 485% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.463917525773 647% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 12.6804123711 55% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 16.3608247423 141% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 33.0775218083 44.8134815571 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.857142857 76.5299724578 166% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 16.8248392259 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.71428571429 4.34317383033 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 7.41237113402 40% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.389310915318 0.216113520407 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.201929105968 0.0766984524023 263% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.276793184236 0.0603063233224 459% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.310654581375 0.12726935374 244% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.326896298132 0.0580467560999 563% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 8.37731958763 192% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 70.7449484536 80% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 3.82989690722 292% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 7.45979381443 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 8.71597938144 172% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 7.59969072165 111% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 41.2886597938 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 8.62886597938 174% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 8.54432989691 131% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 8.15463917526 184% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 8, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , it
...ountry between 1920 and 2019. Overall,it is clear that the usage percentage of e...
^^^
Line 3, column 99, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , while
...appliances in the firgure was increasing,while the number of hours of housework per ho...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 95, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , vaccum
...ich were washing machines, refrigerators,vaccum and cleaner started at 0%, 30%, and 40%...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 303, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...70% and interacted with the refrigerator  line,while other appliances continued to...
^^
Line 5, column 309, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , while
...d interacted with the refrigerator  line,while other appliances continued to rise. Bet...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 18, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...tabilizing at 100%. On the other hand,the hours of housework per week started at ...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, moreover, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 4.92783505155 0% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 5.05154639175 218% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 32.9175257732 9% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 26.3917525773 114% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.85567010309 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 888.0 937.175257732 95% => OK
No of words: 161.0 206.0 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.51552795031 4.54256449028 121% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56210296601 3.78020617076 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.24891627553 2.54303337028 128% => OK
Unique words: 95.0 127.690721649 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.590062111801 0.622605031667 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 246.6 290.88556701 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.13402061856 22% => OK
Article: 4.0 0.824742268041 485% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.463917525773 647% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 12.6804123711 55% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 16.3608247423 141% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 33.0775218083 44.8134815571 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.857142857 76.5299724578 166% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 16.8248392259 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.71428571429 4.34317383033 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 7.41237113402 40% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.389310915318 0.216113520407 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.201929105968 0.0766984524023 263% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.276793184236 0.0603063233224 459% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.310654581375 0.12726935374 244% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.326896298132 0.0580467560999 563% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 8.37731958763 192% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 70.7449484536 80% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 3.82989690722 292% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 7.45979381443 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 8.71597938144 172% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 7.59969072165 111% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 41.2886597938 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 8.62886597938 174% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 8.54432989691 131% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 8.15463917526 184% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.