The bar chart below shows the results of a survey conducted by a personnel department at a major company. The survey was carried out on two groups of workers: those aged from 18-30 and those aged 45-60, and shows factors affecting their work performance. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words.
The bar chart illustrates the data of factors deteriorating work performance in two age groups: those aged 18-30 and those aged 45-60.
Overall, according to the 18 -30 age group, the chance for personal development contributed crucially to performance at work, whereas the work environment was the minor affecting factor. However, for 45-60 people, money was the factor that wholly affected their work performance, while job security did not have much impact on work.
According to the data of young people aged 18 to 30, a flexible working environment and promotion prospects also ranked second in the bar chart, nearly 10% less than the percentage of personal development opportunities. The data on the relaxed work environment category for the 45-60 age group was almost 50% less than the proportion of the 18-30 age group. The percentage of promotion prospects for the age group 45-60 was 30% less than that of the 18-30, with approximately 50%.
Moreover, the work environment was the second aspect, to the 45-60 age group, that did not severely impact performance at work, with just 30%. The data was also the same for the age group of 18-30. The same pattern showed in the category of team spirit, where both age groups tied with more than 60%.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
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The bar chart illustrates the data of fa...
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...ose aged 18-30 and those aged 45-60. Overall, according to the 18 -30 age gro...
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...ty did not have much impact on work. According to the data of young people ag...
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...f the 18-30, with approximately 50%. Moreover, the work environment was the s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, moreover, second, so, whereas, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 33.7804878049 68% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 3.97073170732 327% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1052.0 965.302439024 109% => OK
No of words: 210.0 196.424390244 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00952380952 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80675409584 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68640653017 2.65546596893 101% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 106.607317073 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504761904762 0.547539520022 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 303.3 283.868780488 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.164954544 43.030603864 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.888888889 112.824112599 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 22.9334400587 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.22222222222 5.23603664747 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.407132339749 0.215688989381 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.216646484643 0.103423049105 209% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0890360752332 0.0843802449381 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.304125684031 0.15604864568 195% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0795064746111 0.0819641961636 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.2329268293 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 61.2550243902 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 11.4140731707 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 40.7170731707 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The bar chart illustrates the data of fa...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ose aged 18-30 and those aged 45-60. Overall, according to the 18 -30 age gro...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ty did not have much impact on work. According to the data of young people ag...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...f the 18-30, with approximately 50%. Moreover, the work environment was the s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, moreover, second, so, whereas, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 33.7804878049 68% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 3.97073170732 327% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1052.0 965.302439024 109% => OK
No of words: 210.0 196.424390244 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00952380952 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80675409584 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68640653017 2.65546596893 101% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 106.607317073 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504761904762 0.547539520022 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 303.3 283.868780488 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.164954544 43.030603864 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.888888889 112.824112599 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 22.9334400587 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.22222222222 5.23603664747 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.407132339749 0.215688989381 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.216646484643 0.103423049105 209% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0890360752332 0.0843802449381 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.304125684031 0.15604864568 195% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0795064746111 0.0819641961636 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.2329268293 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 61.2550243902 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 11.4140731707 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 40.7170731707 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.