People should look after their health as a duty for a society, rather than for personal benefits. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In contemporary society, it is generally believed that personal healthcare should be made compulsory as it plays a more important role in communities compared to personal benefits. Personally, I partially agree with this statement.
For a variety of reasons, people should take responsibility to stay healthy as this would be beneficial for society. To explain, when people take care of their health properly, they can avoid the risks of picking up diseases. This means that by carefully keeping personal hygiene and follow a healthy diet, people can help diminish certain contagious illness, such as flu or cough. As a result, this can prevent the threats of these diseases from widely spreading among people in a community. For example, in Viet Nam, during covid 19 pandemic, it was people duty to strictly follow certain rules, issued by the government. Particularly, people had to carry a face mask to cover their face as well as to keep social distance in public places. This resulted in a positive outcome as the number of covid patients in Vietnam significantly dropped eventually.
Apart from the above mentioned practical concerns, personal benefits are equally important when it comes to taking care of individual health. To begin with, if working people are healthy, they can become competent, especially to the workforce. In other words, once people pay enough attention to their health condition, they will be able to work consistently without being absent due to diseases. Hence, it is possible that they can make more earnings, contributing to the improvement of their financial status. Even more importantly, for those who are the breadwinner in the family, having good health may help maintain their source of income as they will not take leaves because of illness. As a result, they will still be able to provide financial support for their family and avoid becoming a financial burden if they get sick.
Taking everything into consideration, this reinforces my perspective that looking after one’s health considered personal benefits, although its role in society should also be emphasised.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, look, may, so, still, well, apart from, as to, for example, such as, as a result, as well as, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1783.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 338.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27514792899 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84594009457 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.597633136095 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 555.3 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.1800723193 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.4375 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.125 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0625 7.06120827912 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248887656263 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0758442314785 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0464438063213 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141865907741 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0312296994059 0.056905535591 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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