Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment—doing things they like to do—rather than doing things they should do.
There have always been an argument about whether people spend much of their time on personal enjoyment or not. There is no shortage of opinion on this matter. However if I were forced to give answer, I would definitly be saying that I believe that people do spent a great amount of their time on their enjoyment. It is my firm belief that society gives most of their time for entertainment for a number of reasons, and I will develope these ideas in the susequent paragraph.
To begin with, the variety of social media platforms that we can access nowadays have so much to offer and that makes individuals to spend a lot of their time on them. I have to admit that my opinion on this topic has been profoundly influenced by my personal experience. I beleieve that it is different case to case but there is a direct relation between the amount of time a person spends being distracted by social media and the number of applications they have. As result they spend majority of their day for their enjoyment. As a result there won't be enough time for important tasks they had to complete throughout the day.
Secondly, the amount of stress we have to handle in today's world makes us want to distract ourselves in someways so that wa can survive our day to day's life. Drawing from my own experience, individuals find distractions, that we call joy to vent from their problems. Moreover we spend a lot of time and money to find experiences that we can truely enjoy ourselves and since the world has developed so much, that we can accomplish things in less time, and we have more time to waste, people decide to spend that said time on their fun experiences.
In the light of the reasons mentioned, I strongly believe that society spend a great amount of their time on useless personal enjoyment that doesn't cause any developement in our personal life and we as a bunch should try and lessen this said matter, so that we can go forward as a society.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 161, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
... no shortage of opinion on this matter. However if I were forced to give answer, I woul...
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Line 5, column 268, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...e call joy to vent from their problems. Moreover we spend a lot of time and money to fin...
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Line 7, column 142, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...time on useless personal enjoyment that doesnt cause any developement in our personal ...
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Line 7, column 218, Rule ID: TRY_AND[1]
Message: "Try and" is common in colloquial speech, but "'try to'" is recommended for writing.
Suggestion: try to
... personal life and we as a bunch should try and lessen this said matter, so that we can...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1601.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 352.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.54829545455 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54165802255 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.497159090909 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 502.2 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.5455495139 48.9658058833 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.153846154 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0769230769 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.84615384615 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171878989922 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0595900642703 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.044592810314 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101767673052 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0267088803403 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 58.1214874552 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.41 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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