Nowadays, celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this is a bad example to adolescents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In today's fast-paced world, the limelight on celebrities often centres on their luxurious lifestyles and aesthetic appeal, overshadowing their significant accomplishments. This trend has triggered a discourse about whether this undue focus on glamour and luxury sets an undesirable model for the younger generation. From my standpoint, I am inclined to agree that the trend of elevating celebrities' wealth and allure over their genuine achievements can negatively impact impressionable adolescents.
To embark on this analysis, the disproportionate emphasis on celebrities' materialistic indulgence rather than their tangible contributions skews the notion of success for young minds. The pervasive images of sprawling mansions, extravagant parties, and designer ensembles may sow the seeds of a misconstrued connection between success and conspicuous consumption. Consequently, the aspirations of adolescents may veer away from meaningful accomplishments, becoming tethered to the pursuit of superficial pleasures.
Beyond that, the constant exposure to images of celebrities' extravagant lives could nurture feelings of inadequacy and self-doubt among impressionable minds. Adolescents often internalize that financial wealth and physical attractiveness are prerequisites for gaining societal respect and admiration. Consequently, they may form unrealistic ideals about life's benchmarks and potential, leading to disillusionment and feelings of inadequacy when these ideals remain out of reach.
Moreover, overshadowing celebrities' substantive achievements could erode the foundation of role models who spearhead positive social change. Adolescents require exemplars who embody qualities like resilience, compassion, and innovation. Nevertheless, when accomplishments are eclipsed by extravagance, the profound tapestry of achievements that can genuinely motivate future generations is diminished.
In conclusion, spotlighting celebrities for wealth and appearance rather than achievements distorts success and hampers growth. Media and society must highlight accomplishments alongside images, giving adolescents a realistic view of achievement.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 13.1623246493 23% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1878.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.70714285714 5.12529762239 131% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.62516009499 2.80592935109 129% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.660714285714 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 570.6 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 2.0 1.60771543086 124% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.5007002705 49.4020404114 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 134.142857143 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.92857142857 7.06120827912 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2713098631 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0801266701894 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0685803363309 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133885566034 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0653881071111 0.056905535591 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.2 13.0946893788 154% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 17.34 50.2224549098 35% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 21.64 12.4159519038 174% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.68 8.58950901804 136% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 78.4519038076 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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