Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
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Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim AND the reason on which that claim is based.
A career should be defined as an element of life that adds more meaning to it. Life is a series of phases where you have to make a choice every now and then. Youth often receive advice to follow their dreams and to create a path for themselves. But, many people often confuse following your dreams with becoming selfish. Is it wrong? I personally feel that I'm afraid I have to disagree with the Claim made. I would always endorse the idea of listening to your heart over the trends of the market. There is certainly nothing wrong with being selfish for yourself. To explain my stand, I would present 3 situations.
Firstly, since we are talking about young people and their dreams, they are often linked with their success or the jobs that they might end up doing. The 'hot' jobs of today might not always be as famous as it is. For example, After World War II, when nuclear bombs exploded in Hiroshima and Nagasaki, a nuclear age began. Soon everyone wanted to be a nuclear engineer. But if we look now, everyone feels that where there is AI there is success. In such a dynamic world, it is always beneficial to listen to your heart and do what you really want to do. Following your dreams become very important.
Talking about dreams reminds me of the very famous Narayan Murthy, the co-founder of Infosys. He had a dream to bring a technical revolution to the world. To support his dreams, he left his job and gave his heart and soul to Infosys. It might have not been easy to give up your only means of income, to be so selfish for yourself, that you keep the financial stability of your family at stake. Yet, his decision to follow his dreams gave us the multinational company - Infosys.
This idea of following dreams is not only valid in terms of education or business, but also in terms of government policies, rules, and ideas. Several countries in this world, like China, the USA, etc. have a 5-year rule, where a new representative is given the opportunity to run the Government. This allows new ideas to come up. But what is the driving force of these ideas? It's the dreams that these social workers or politicians see. It's their dream to bring a particular change in their country. To fulfill this, they work hard and make sure their dream leads their country to see a brighter sunrise the next day.
Some people might disagree with me stating that people's dreams are inherently selfish or not always for the good of others. But when we specifically talk about young people, as mentioned in the claim, I feel that youth's dreams are the future of this world. They should be left free to think, to dream, and to fly. Even if they are selfish they would be good for their career. They should always be backed to not only follow their dreams but to be behind them so consistently and determinedly, that the dream is fulfilled with complete success. No goals can be stated as worthy or unworthy. One's needs might be the other's leisure. Thus with this, I conclude that by the 3 situations considering education, business, and government policies, I keep my stand strongly that young people should be given wings to fly wherever they want, and should not be tied to the rope of goals that the society state as 'worthy.'
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 139, Rule ID: EVERY_NOW_AND_THEN[1]
Message: Use simply 'now and then'.
Suggestion: now and then
... phases where you have to make a choice every now and then. Youth often receive advice to follow t...
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Line 1, column 358, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...sh. Is it wrong? I personally feel that Im afraid I have to disagree with the Clai...
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Line 4, column 378, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
...at is the driving force of these ideas? Its the dreams that these social workers or...
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Line 4, column 439, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
...hese social workers or politicians see. Its their dream to bring a particular chang...
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Line 5, column 631, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...Ones needs might be the others leisure. Thus with this, I conclude that by the 3 sit...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, look, really, so, then, thus, as to, for example, i feel, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.5258426966 154% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 79.0 33.0505617978 239% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 58.6224719101 126% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2646.0 2235.4752809 118% => OK
No of words: 581.0 442.535393258 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.55421686747 5.05705443957 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90957651803 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38083825243 2.79657885939 85% => OK
Unique words: 285.0 215.323595506 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490533562823 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 799.2 704.065955056 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 6.24550561798 336% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.77640449438 450% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 37.0 20.2370786517 183% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.2658664496 60.3974514979 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.5135135135 118.986275619 60% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7027027027 23.4991977007 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.75675675676 5.21951772744 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 10.2758426966 204% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277293256402 0.243740707755 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.064843217626 0.0831039109588 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0616688112468 0.0758088955206 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153737788354 0.150359130593 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0720464752937 0.0667264976115 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.9 14.1392134831 56% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 48.8420337079 150% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 12.1743820225 56% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.81 12.1639044944 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.23 8.38706741573 86% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 11.8971910112 46% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.