Children today are too dependent on computers and electronic entertainment. It would be better for them to be outside playing sports and taking part in more traditional pastimes than spending all day indoors.
Do you agree or disagree? Write an essay of about 250 words to express your opinion.
In this day and age, with the rapid advancement in the sphere of technology, entertainment using only electronic devices has been undergoing an apparent rise in popularity. It is not unusual to see children playing games on their computers or watching videos on their phones for hours on end. Personally, I fully agree with the view that they should take part in outdoor activities instead, which works wonders for their health and their soft skills.
To start with, sports activities help to enhance their physical health. In fact, recreational activities such as playing video games, watching television, and scrolling through social media do not encompass considerable movement, which certainly leads to several ailments, a few of which are obesity, weak muscles, low blood flow, etc. It is highly likely that they will also be taken ill with blurry vision, and short-sightedness as they stare at the screen restlessly. Therefore, it is advisable for them to take up sports or traditional pastimes where they engage in numerous movements.
Additionally, pastimes that include inherent interaction with others offer children opportunities to sharpen their soft skills. Unlike on video games or social media platforms where one mostly communicates by typing texts, outdoor sports, and games require one to put his or her thoughts across through verbal methods or body language. It is thanks to performing such acts frequently that children can become successful communicators in their future affairs. Moreover, working with others to achieve ultimate results, they also accumulate collaboration skills. Take team sports as an example. The members of one team cooperate to beat another, which necessitates collaboration skills.
In summary, I believe there is need for children to turn away from electronic entertainment which is detrimental to them and start joining in outdoor activities in their free time as they have positive impacts on their health as well as their social skills.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, moreover, so, therefore, well, in fact, in summary, such as, as well as, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1687.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 311.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42443729904 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92962926653 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.604501607717 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.600795785 49.4020404114 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.5 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2142857143 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.57142857143 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149262353149 0.244688304435 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0567879950395 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0480922923705 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0946193265439 0.151304729494 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0336142848036 0.056905535591 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, moreover, so, therefore, well, in fact, in summary, such as, as well as, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1687.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 311.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42443729904 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92962926653 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.604501607717 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.600795785 49.4020404114 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.5 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2142857143 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.57142857143 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149262353149 0.244688304435 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0567879950395 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0480922923705 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0946193265439 0.151304729494 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0336142848036 0.056905535591 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.